Intresting. Two short stories about two differnt people. It shows the brutal truth about how the world is. However, the first story gives the reader a reason to always believe in making the right choices.

Not that suicide is the answer to lifes problems, but it shows that good deeds will be repayed with good deeds, and greed with greed.

Some slight spelling errors, some sentances could used some work. Once again, the story is well-written. A continuation to this story would work out nicely.

Again, a wonderful story...Nice message, nice wording...Reminded me somewhat of "Click" or things like that...I like that message too ^^ Again, kudos...Can't think of a thing that'd improve this one...

-Vince

Beautiful... Perhaps a little more body might give it a little jump, but, the way it is as a short story, the message and the situations...It's beautiful, proud to say my big sister wrote this ^^ Kudos

-Vince

amazing, as usual, let me know when u add more.

Simply beautiful. Very well written, I love the ending. Will there be any more chapters?

Howdy sissy(I know my spelling sucks, ignore it)

Okay, so i just finished reading the story and I'm sorry to say I was really dissapointed. I THINK I like the characters(I know i like Wil) but I can't decide because the way it is written, you don't build enough of a relationship with the reader for them to connect with the characters as well as they should. It's just too vague and too simple. You never gave any sort of background, it was just here are some characters and here is a section of their life. You never explained WHY Arath wanted her soul, what it accomplished for him and how it would affect her. Only three characters were at all defined and about that many were just mentioned and nothing was really explained. The story seemed like it should have been sad or at least sadder, even if the ending was happy, so that people felt more emotional before she was sort of saved.(PUMKIN PIE!

That was really good!! It was bitter sweet, tho I may be wrong becasue I never use that term a lot...>>

I like it...
got a lil confused but ima dumb ** so yeah...

that was really good! have U tried putting more of a twist on your storys? try it that way OK? will U read all mine?