yes...this hit the right spot! I completely agree with everything you are saying and yes i can say i relate to you in this poem. Its very nice, the words are simple, yet effective^_^ Great work, and thanks 4 mi review^^

At the end of the sixth line you shouldn't have used 'too'. Don't use punctuation only on one line it doesn't fit in. But I think that you should have used punctuation in and this poem would look better and make more sense in stanza format.

Please revise

Keep writing!!

Loz