(I don't know how to reply to your reply to my last review so i'll post it here)

Thanks for the reply to my review, hehe. And I went for the shorter stories first because I was -supposed- to get to sleep that night... Still happened later than expected.

Your writing is -definitely- worth my time, I just have to find the actual time to read the longer stories. I will eventually! Also eventual publication would be awesome, you certainly are better than a bunch of published writers out there. As for older work... GAWD I look at my old crap and cringe. You can take a look at my page if you ever have time... Half of them were written in middle school.

Anyway, see you around!

~Sara

I really enjoyed reading this ^^ It was like a documentary or diary entry or something...or an episode! I definitely agree that it had to be written in first-person. But, wow...Kenny went through a LOT O_O What an awkward way to find out you're gay... But at least he found Andy! And cross-dressing is fun ^^ Anyway, I had fun reading this! :D

and man, when he screams out that he'd get a sex change if tony would be with him... so painful. you just feel his desperateness and he's so pathetic. like, just the action that he's completely disregarding his self-esteem and shouting that out in a parking lot. harsh. but good, you know, effective.

hmm, you're really into the transvestite character, huh? well, i cant say i liked this story as much as the one with danny in it, but it's your first, so it's only to be expected that your writing develops with your stories.

This story was a lot of fun. Kenny's voice was interesting to read... if that's how guys in their twenties think I can understand why they seem how they do on the outside :) I really like that you wrote from the perspective of a guy who at first in the narration was completely uncomfortable with his sexuality, or at least derisive toward being "a fag" etcetera. It's not as often seen and it was nice to read the transformation.

"One thing I've learned from all this is not to over-fucking-analyze yourself, because it will just lead you in circles - questioning your motivations for questioning yourself for questioning your motivations. You can't do it. You can't be an outside observer of yourself. It just can't be done. The best you can really do is say “I think this about myself, but I realize I may change my mind later.” And try not to be too surprised when you discover that you were wrong."

I love this. It's really true and people need to understand it.

The introduction of Andy, and Andy's candor, were hilarious! What a great way to start a relationship... sparring then locker room sex. I really liked the ramifications of that, you definitely wrote the aftermath well, with Kenny breaking down followed by a comfortable night.

I really liked Cherry in the beginning, and it was great to see her return. Definitely feel bad for Kenny getting the "turned into a girl party" thrust on him at first though.

The homophobe story was a riot!

Overall, great story, fun style, and looking forward to reading more of your writings!

I apologize if my reviews are too long or rambly... I just liked reading your stories and wanted to make sure you knew it :)

~Sara

Ok,I wanna annoy you a little...

See,this story was just so 'KAWAII'!

Heh...seriously now,it was really cute and sweet,even in those depressing moments.This one feels different than the other stories you wrote; kind of has more fluff in it.
And I really liked the whole 'first person' story telling,made it feel more personal,like he was sitting right across from me while speaking.
Oh,and I really loved the ending. I think I love your endings the most. Don't get me wrong,I love the whole story,just your endings are not cliche like in most stories,and that gives them a lot more impact,if you know what I mean ;)

Aw...! That was adorable! I just want to kill every single homophobe in the entire world!

And hooray for bottoms! They're freaking awesome! WOO! I wanna go put on a dress now! HEHE!

Awesome!

-Blue

I really liked this story. Even cried a little in the middle. You're good. Keep writing!

Okay let's get to the not so nice bits first while there are so few of them: on personal preference I really don't like to use words like "pussy" or "homo" they eww me. But that's just me. And although the way you wrote the sex scene between Andy and Kenny tied into the language and style of the rest of the story, it felt like the most impersonal experience ever, I think it was just comments like "super horny" and "kid in a candy store" that made me frown.

Other than that; sorry did you say FIRST slash fic? This makes me want to sque!
Here we have this grown man who is not so much a man but a KID trapped in a grown man's body. Which makes him all the more endearing and enjoyable to read about.
To be honest, at first I was a little worried because I don't usually fancy this kind of colloquial first person narrative because I've seen people TRY to do it before and not quite succeed. But you effing nailed it. The consistency of Kenny's confusion, his second guessing and habit of RUNNING AWAY (I love that part) gives him realness; I could close my eyes and imagine him.

I absolutely loved the first chapter where he was coming to grips with his feelings for Tony. There were a few phrases that stood out to me: "Well, I'm getting all these vibes from Tony, like he just might swing the other way" -- that HOPEFUL PARANOIA is just LOGIC! And yet no one else bothers to mention it in a slash fic. I'm glad you did.

"Yeah, Tony, I'll be your weird gay buddy and you can be my god-damned dream dude-" -- I am a sucker for sarcastic bitter internal thoughts.

"But Tony's giving me this wicked smile and says, “Wanna dance?” See? Told ya he was oblivious. You can imagine how I took it. I'm in love, remember?" -- yes you ARE. I believe it!

“Tony, I'm gay and I really like you. Like like.” Just like that, I said it. 'Like like'. Jr. High." -- I love it when people are able to associate certain words to certain memories.

This story is like: I'M GAY...NO REALLY!

lovelovelove

I seriously love you dude, I mean every fucking story of yours that I've reading is FANTASTIC! God, you're AWESOME! lol, I was so into this story that whenever I felt like something truly embarrising or sad was going to happen, the aprehention--just KNOWING that something was coming, something bad, but it kept drawing out (to me, anyways)--was so overwhelming that I seriously had to get up and run away from the computer *smacks forhead, leaves hand there to cover face* I ran away, and then took deep breaths, and then I ate potato slad with a peice of bread, before taking the aprehention out on my other stories. lol, THEN I suddenly felt like I just really needed to keep reading your story, but most of the 'omg' feeling was gone, lol, so I could read it without blushing myself to death. Omg, my face has never been so red, lol. I turned up my favorite music and drowned in your story again, lol.

WOOT! SO FUCKING AWESOME! lol, I can't say that enough. *sigh* Your stories are just amazing fun. I get so freakin GIDDY while I read them, or even think about reading them, lol, like right now for instance.

Dude, and the crossdressing thing was HOTT. I mean, me? If I was in Andy's position? Oh GOD . . . *druels* Lucky, lucky dude.

A chapter running on epo, I mean emo. Very fast paced, to me at least, and a quite funny ending. Good writing!

The whole story describes in a quite interesting way how Kenny copes with his new found emotions and isn't destroyed. Partially thanks to his friends, but mainly by daring to accept himself.

"I know I sound stupid and pathetic. Believe me, at the time, I felt stupid and pathetic. Like a freak."
As said, I'm a romantic. I can't imagine love without stupid or pathetic, but maybe that's just me being stupid and pathetic.
I like the way you made Kenny and Andy get together.
Nice chapter and the charachters grow in depth is also very good.

OK, I owe you a review.
I liked this chapter. I'm a romantic guy and I could feel Kenny's turmoil to cope with this, 'entirely' different man he is/turns out to be.
Having read other works you confided to the web, I knew you can write. I also knew you can describe very well the darker sides of the human nature. And so you did.
Thumbs up.

I liked your story. It is different from some others I have read.

Haha, that's too precious! Love the light ending, although it was a little disappointing that it didn't go more in-depth with Kenny's romance/relationship with Andy, but love your work!