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Midnight In Eden 2007-02-11 . chapter 1
Nice little haiku. One thing, when working within the constraints of haiku, I always feel that the language has to be so carefully selected as each word counts. With that in mind, perhaps there might be two better adjectives than "heavy" and "sweet"?

Otherwise, you've got a cute idea.

.:midnight:.
Awen1923 2006-11-30 . chapter 1
Nicely written. A sad image, though.
Basara 2006-11-17 . chapter 1
somehow patient...
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