OK, this is the third poem I have read from you.

And it's possibly the most emotional. I like how the sentences run into each other. It's like a mantra, something never ending.

What I would say is sometimes punctuation is a bit strange. You probably meant it, but I'd just watch the syntax a little.

Fantastic. You're now on the favourite authors list. I look forward to reading more of your writing.

Loved this poem, maybe more so because I can relate to it. But objectively it's an amazing piece with great rhythm and flow. I loved reading it and getting lost into it. The piece just captured you.

Great Job

I think thats the most amazing poem i've ever read. You'd never think it was possible to encompass so much emotion into one poem, but you've done it!
Absolutly Amazing!
--Darkest Angels

wow. it's long, but definitely worth the read. that poem is amazing.

this is such an amazing poem, I really love it, deffo one of the best of urs i've read. really brillant

x

Long but AMAZING, every word and ever line I especially like the ending, how it was kind of abrupt but fitted perfectrly with the rest of the poem- Alyssa

Hm, i liked the begining of the poem alot, but i think you carried it on way too long..and it kinda loses its meaning towards the end, and i lost intrest in what you had to say, unlike the begining when i couldn't get enough of it. also, the way you describe everything is confusing, i don't get a lcear picture of what is happening. but its a good idea and the begining is good.

Really passionate... I like this, very expressive, what else to say?

W-o-w. That one has so many layers it could take all day (maybe week?) to uncover them all. Superb!

really good i really like it but i think u need to move "each brought out by the person we thought we hated" into two phrases or lines what ever it is that they are called... it seem sto long and doesnt really fit there with the length... very nice, i seen some people try to rhym every word and it gets really annoying, but every few lines like urs works well... um... just good, kinda a story in poems and i think one of my top 10 favorites of yours xD
~cassie~

oh my god, oh my god, THIS IS SO ** AMAZING. i love the new style, i love how you're brave enough to experiment and **, this is incredible. this is beautiful, this is raw, this is gorgeous, i love the way it isn't formatted because it just brings out the raw beauty and power of your words and THIS IS INCREDIBLE and it makes me want to cry because this is just absolutely amazing and words can't express how much i love this and I WANT THIS i wanted this with her but it doesn't matter. i'm not very coherent at the moment but just know that I ** LOVE THIS.

Wow I love it. It seems so unedited (not like lots of spelling errors but like just plain truth), just straight out. GREAT poem. You ever listen too Red Jumpsuit Apparatus (it's a band)?

the rhyming that youve used in this is really interesting, and it has caused some quite random line breaks but i think you can pull it off. Even if you would plan to edit this now, i have to say i think its abslutely gorgeous just as it is. Its extremely fast moving, and vey bitter, just the right length so it tells the whole thing in enough detal w/o getting boring. Luvely work, & i love this whole new line of stuff that your moving on to. ~Bex xx

This is more wonderful work, darling. I like that you’re branching out. It’s very brave of you. The rhyme in this was especially well done. I didn’t even notice it until I was about three-fourths of the way through the poem. And that, I believe, is the mark of an excellent poet. Far too often rhyme uses the poet instead of the other way around.

Cheers, Marie.

Mm. I can just hear it, words rushing to get the whole story told.

I don't know if you're planning to do anything to it because it's unedited, but I think it's beautiful. One of the most real pieces [not that the other's aren't, but hopefully you know what I mean because I ramble and can't explain myself very well]

I'm horrible at critisizing, so sorry if that's what you wanted.

Have a wonderful day,
S.B.