hmm i didnt think it was a terrible chapter, on the contrary, i think it was actually rather good. i have read many many many terrible chapters. and if you think this is terrible, you must not have read very many stories on this site. very good story and i hope you get to writing the next chapter soon.

hmm i dont think it is moving TOO fast, but i can tell it is a fast paced story. one to the next chapter.

we superconsoler not really im not that fond of them myself... i dont think this chapter is horrible... but then again i know what happens MWHAHAHAHA! I AM THE ALL KNOWING um... BEST FRIEND OF NICOLE *cough* i mean TALLIA MWHAHAHA um this chapter explains a lot but you have to pay attention ya um bye... cant wait until they come into the story.

um hi nicole... i mean tallia ^.^ whoops i hope you dont mind if everyone knows your real name or not but oh well. Oh yeah the story well i like it i cant wait to see well i already know who i want to see but i dont want to spoil it for everyone so uh bye oh and did i mention i like this story A LOT!

this could be pretty cool. hope for more soon.
Pyrgus.