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| kabachan 2008-10-06 ch 18,  | abuseahahha luv ur story...u got some mispelled words other then that i luved the story and great imagation too keep up the good work i hope to read more of your stories hehe...bye luv |
| kabachan 2008-10-05 ch 2, | abusehi ur story is good so far but kind of got one miss spelled word in ur work but do keep up the good work |
| AMM3485 2008-07-05 ch 18, | abuseI loved this story! There were some mistakes, like missing words, grammar mistakes and using the wrong spelling of words of but you did a really great job. |
| . 2008-06-23 ch 15, anon. | abuseforget edward cullen, i want christian. i know there are plenty of girls who would stab me for blasphemy right now but whatevs... |
| . 2008-06-23 ch 7, anon. | abuse-numb, not num -through, not thou -for **A** long time -breathtaking, one word -bored, not board |
| . 2008-06-23 ch 4, anon. | abuse*through, not threw *often, not offend *insurance |
| . 2008-06-23 ch 3, anon. | abusethis is really good *sale, not sail *tow, not toe |
| shiraz 2008-04-29 ch 1, | abusei just read this and it is abeselotly awesome! its a graet read it should be a real book i mean its funny (tick) its romantic (tick) its perfect (tick) and its got that annoying chrectar you hate to love! (chritian) god i never want the stories to end i mean it! XoXo shiraz |
| naokoangel01 2008-04-18 ch 1, | abuseWow! I just fell in love with this story Its amazing Please continue to make more stories like this |
| Lucia 3 2008-03-05 ch 18, anon. | abuseWow! I loved it. I coudn´t stop laughing ,and bitting my nails, and awing, and... you get the idea. |
| reader 2008-01-06 ch 18, anon. | abuseWhat a cute story! Excellent ending. That sentence "'Christian I'm gonna kill you!' I yell and I heard him laugh as he rounded a corner, black cat tail flying" made me smile. It IS missing a couple commas (after Christian and after yell). Comma errors aren't as noticeable as spelling ones, and those did get a bit distracting while I was reading. In any case, thanks for the lovely entertainment. |
| random2one 2007-12-24 ch 18, | abuseI just read this story. It's cute and well written! Good job on it! |
| editor_1 2007-09-09 ch 18, anon. | abuseRight, so this was a very entertaining story, but you have a really big problem with spelling. I think what probably happened is that you were typing this quickly and spellcheck must have changed the words for you or something, because this is just really bad. First of all, rewritten has two 't's. The word 'scars' should replace the word 'scares' in the last chapter. In one place the word 'forrum' replaces the word 'form'. There are a lot more similar errors that I can't remember, but if you want to be serious about your work, I definitely think you should be more careful about editing and take a second look at this story. |
| LittleMissVampire 2007-09-07 ch 1, | abuseOh. My. God. I think I'm in love with you... I know I'm in love wit your story, though.. *sees if there is a squel yet* |
| Girlbrainiac 2007-07-31 ch 1, | abuseI love your characters, all of them, and enjoyed reading this quite a bit, as well as the sequel. I do think, however, that you need to flesh out your plot just a bit. Things go too quickly in the end, though she was there for quite a while. At other times, the reader tends to forget that she is in danger, that someone burned her apartment for a reason, that someone's in the shadows waiting to get her... You're very character driven, which is not a bad thing, (As I said, I love your characters,) I just think that, at times, you spend so much time on character development that it overshadows your plot. Just a suggestion. Girlbrainiac |