It's a shame you haven't updated this yet, I really want to know what happens next. Please?

) This is really good. I'm kind of tired and it's 11:56 right now, plus I'm kind of "whoa that's totally gnarly dude" right now, so I'll tell you that I was confused at the part where you said her lips stretched over perfect white teeth because I thought that there were no people in the story and that it was about ants...even though you said it was called the beehive. That wasn't your fault...that was me being tired. Oh there was nothing wrong with this grammatically except for one punctuation thing: "...for I must be honest with you; I do not regret what happened." The semicolon should be a comma. That's it. I liked the overall idea and plot of this story and I think it seems like it's going in a good direction. Of course, why wouldn't it, since lovely elaine face is writing. The queen is a buttmunch-fartknocker-orlando-bloon-vonage-half-As ian FACE though...I hope she DIES. ) LOVE