Okay, the Instructer sorta reminded me of a friend's father, who was a Marine...I am liking this place already, with the brain-fried prof. in first place! At least now I understand where Hevalon is, and all of this reminds me somewhat of Macross, but in a good way.

I have to say that it's getting more and more interesting, and I'll have to read futher to see if my questions will be answered or not (in which case, I'll be bugging you endlessly because of it!) but I think they will all pan out in the end...

This story is good, and it's getting better!

See ya!

Weird monsters? check!
Nice, powerful mecha? check!
Some humor throughout? Oh, check!

I liked the beginning of this story, and I think I'll continue with this series as I see you've already gotten up to the third installment and I love mecha! I'm still wondering just where this city of Hevalon is located geographically speaking, such as in Europe, Asia or in the Americas somewhere since they speak english from what Meige said in the cockpit (unless he was speaking rhetorically, of course!).
I have to say that Terry seemed rather interesting from my POV, as I just love an annoying best friend in manga-related stories! As for what this just barely reminds me of, NGE comes to mind...but just barely...Full Metal Panic with the mecha's A.I tho'.

Well, I'll stop here, but I will be reading the rest of this as it does seem interesting!
See ya!
Ukitsu

Well, this chapter was pretty... cute :D
I like Reece already (and I bet she's some sort of Kali commader or her greatest foe... I just don't believe that she got so lucky during training).
A chapter like this could've been even placed in some sort of romance story (slash humor, naturally).
A nice brea from the fights.
Good job.
Sadly I'll have to cut the reading short for now, but I shall return in the near future to read more.

Hey! Sorry it took me so long to review, but I wasn't on FicitionPress for a while and then I wanted to re-read the previous chapters, just to make sure I haven't forgotten anything.
Anyways, on to the review:
This chapter was good. The battle with that Kuntalie was nicely done and now I feel intrigued as to what's wrong with Amy (it'd appear she did saw Meige, but why won't she just say so?).
The only thing that seemed slightly strange was Kali suddenly appearing on the core training. She didn't seem to attend before. Or did I miss something?
Anyway this was a good chapter. I can't wait to find out how this evolves (and seeing that you've already started volume 3, I guess I should quicken the paste if I wanna catch up ^_^').
Good job!

Ok. Now, that I have read the entire first volume of your story, I must say that you are quite an avid writer when it comes to actions scenes. The beginning of your story had a quite bland feel to it; the writing was lacking and your characters felt a little one-dimensional(actually, Meige still feels a little...boring), but as the story progressed one could see how you improved.

Your description began to gain some flesh and your characters seemed more alive than before, especially due the addition of Reece (my favourite character) and the twins Mavina and Kali. I thought the last few chapters were abosuletly stunning, if there is any other word to describe it. The action was so vivid and detailed that I was left confused sometimes because of the tonnes of technological terms you used (it was also hard to distinguish between what was made up and what not ^^, but that might just have been me). Yet, it didn't make the chapters any less epic. I think you deserve an award for that, really. ^^ You have got talent.

I am not going into detail about my thoughts of your plot, but I think its very interesting and though it may not be totally original (what is, in the world of fiction?), the mystery concenrning Meige's past and the whole Sellan vs Ceneran (did I spell that right?) war is the main driving force of the entire story.

Now, putting all the critique aside: I love this story and I am currently reading Volume 2 (which I see you have finished as well ^^). Well done. Please, continue the good work.

By the way, I have got to mention that I know it's not easy to write stories involving Mechas. Especially the action scenes! It's hard to draw a line between the description; when will you describe the pilot's action and when the mechas? I myself am currently writing a mecha story (Maidens of él Valentia) and posted the first two chapters here. Anyone who is interested can check it out ^^.

I thought it was avery wonderful story I relly enjoyed it and can't wate for more. I think you are a really good writer. keep up the good work

'“Where is Dad anyway,”; “What do you mean,” ; how did it end up here then. ' Questions should be ended by question marks, I do believe.

'She protested that she made breakfast and his father gave in. So, he ordered Chinese.'
hmm, if I am not very mistaken, your timeframe in this scenario ranged from twelve in the afternoon to six in the evening, no? And breakfast is supposed to be served in the mornings unless of course this particular family has some weird eating habits...

And also, I can't really get my mind around the ending of this sentence. He gave in to her demands that she make breakfast, and he then ordered Chinese?

'He closed his eyes thinking of way he could tell them about Aegis.' You obviously left a 'the' or a '--s' here, typo I think.

“Amy, you have your own car girl?” “This is no time to be dozing off man.”
Some commas would come in handy here.

Sorry about the long time it's taken for me to review back. I had been taking quite a long break for FP due to college and church commitments and the like, while also working on a new story.

I'll try to read through the rest of your story when I have more time. Till then...

Meh... that took me an entire day to read... It was worth it though. I've been trying to figure out what makes your story special. The plot works, but that's not your specialty is it? It's the characters. You make such interesting characters, characters that are so...in the anime sense... real. Their struggle makes sense, and none of it is really over the top. It's the same with Dream of Reality, The GAT Club, and Seraphim Crusade. Maybe you should entertain the idea of introducing the story to an anime making company. You never know, you could get lucky.

I'm looking forward to reading your future work. Keep writing

Your Fan,

Snip2r

Tadam! That's a quick review, eh?
Okay, to start off: the fight was pretty good (I believe I stated it before, but I saw who pilot Valkyrie from the start of the match). But Jet and Scopes being on Kali's side is quite a surprise. I'm wondering if Kali's "the bad guy" at this point, coz it seems so.
This is getting quite intense and intriguing.
Good job.

Finally got some time to read more.
Overall it was a nice chapter (though it seems quite obvious that this mysterious hacker is Kali), thought the robot that hacker used seems a bit too resistant to damage (I mean, crush a rocket in its hand... kinda Gundam like), but oh well. Besides that it was a really good chapter.
Good job.

Good to see that Meige is not one of those 'undefeatable heroes' (but boy, he's a wimp to lose every simulation :D). That was a pretty good chapter (it wonders me though what that scene in the arcade was for). And more questions arise. This is really getting interesting. Good job.

Well, school always bored me, some I didn't find this chapter that exciting (maybe besides the obstacle course, though it's surprising that they had to do it on their first class).
And that Theo guy... I have an idea as to why that scene was placed in the story, but I'll leave it to myself for the time being. The only thing hat's troubling me right now is the 'final goal' of this story. Meaning the main plot line, coz by the way your wrote it, I doubt that it's a collection of stories connected with each other just by the characters.

Well, it's good to see a story where the hero has to train. It's a good thing that you didn't made Meige overly powerful. And that past Aegis was talking about is intriguing (kinda reminds me a bit of "Escaflowne"). It's not a bad idea how you presented some aspects of piloting those mechs with training (way more interesting then the way Meige tried to learn them a chapter before). I do wonder what those monsters really are... I'm guess they have something to do with Meige's past, but I suppose only reading on will tell.
Good work.

Well, overall the chapter was good, though slightly filler-upish in my opinion. The comedy aspects were a nice touch and I hope Amy will play a more important part (I wonder if you'll reveal what was that destiny/goal event).
The lack of giant robots in this chappie surprised my slightly (but I gotta hand it to Meige: I could never read as much as him of somethig like those books... especially the one with all the diagrams).
The ending is pretty intriguing. I do believe I know what idea popped in Meige's head... however, if he's right, it'd be more likely for the military to find Aegis by now (considering she's rather valueable). Either way, I can't wait to find out about the outcome of Meige's theory.

Okay, to start off, I must admit I was never a fan of "big robot stories", but this one actually got me quite interested.
The action may not be spectacular, but the thing that counts most, the storyline, is quite intriguing. So far not much is known, but that's okay, since I prefer to keep some things for later in my stories as well. Luckily you wrote everything that was needed to understand the story till this point and that's enough.
I'm also glad that avoid stretching things (one of the things I always respect in a story) and the events didn't seem to bore.
Overall this story has potencial and even though it's a robot story, I'll be sure to read the rest sometime soon, so you can expect more reviews from me.
Good job.