You really ought to do a little reasearch on thigns before you write about them, the innacurate description with the heroin...well, that's not really my place to talk about since I've never done it, but I can say with some certainty, that if you cut veins and arteries, unless you're already in a hospital, you will die. And you most certainly won't be worried about whether you have a migrane or not.

Another thing, normal people don't talk like that in an emergency 'is he responsive?' no one asks that, at least, not in those words.

Even if he survived everything that should have killed him in this chapter, he wouldn't be even remotely awake or communicative.

Despite the lack or realism though, this is realyl good, very well written.

PAT!!
I just woke up like half an hour ago. BEST MORNING WAKE UP SEX EVER. I am so glad you wrote this!! I LOVE IT! So hot. Especially the against the wall handjobs. Dear jebus lawdy that was sexy. PATIKINS IS A PROFESSIONAL SMUT WRITER yes she is. Oh I love it love it love it. And this scene made me really fall in love in a weird with Christian. Finally taking initiative, pulling Trevor back, initiating that whole thing...I mean that's a HUGE step for his character. I loved it. So sexy, but really a good part of the story as well.
And now that I'm done gushing about the sex, I would like to say a few things about the story line, which was equally wonderful. Christian makes such a huge step at intimacy and love and closeness that I found myself really grabbing onto this hope. Like, maybe things CAN be normal. Of course, there's a lot of baggage, but it really is ray-of-light-and-hope sex, for sure. And the dialogue on the couch was very good, very real. Same concerns we all go through when we take that step with someone we have feelings for.
Also, amen on the drunkdrivingisbad trevor speech. Made me give him virtual hugs. =)
Anyway, I'm just so excited about this chapter. BEST CHAPTER EVER. Are you happy with it? I think it can take the story line so many places it couldn't really go before...sexy places as well as complex interesting LITERARY situations, if that makes any sense.
Last bits, last bits. Drunk dialogue was dead on hilarious. The lead up to sexual contact was believable, real, not over the top. And ultimately I really really really like that we see a newer side of Christian here. The fact that he is concscious of the fact that he should of stayed in bed with Trevor makes me feel like he is starting to grow to the point as a person where he can extend help/comfort/support to others, which is something he obviously had trouble with before because of the amazing about of ** that had happened to him. But it gives you a sense of real evolution as a character and I really liked that. It makes the story more real because characters, like people, should evolve. Plus the intrigue of role reversal...him comforting Trevor vs Trevor comforting him.
ANYWAY I LOVE IT! I'm so glad you wrote it, I can't believe you wrote it so FAST. Go Patikins, sexy slash princess! And yes, I just called you a princess. =) Princess Pazuzu.

PATIKINS.
I don't know whether to sob over the mother's death or get all mushy and sentimental over falling asleep on the couch together. So I shall have to do both.
Okay. First. Expertly crafted death. I absolutely HATE to that phrase, but I don't know how else to describe it. There's the forboding of the call being cut off, and the rain. But you sort of forget over the appointment, the discussion of the nerve damage. And then it sort of hits you. And by the time you cut to the scene with the casket, it's like bowled you over and you're reeling almost as much as Christian. It's hard to introduce a death and have it not come off as tacky or fake-ish, but you pulled it off amazingly well and it definately broke my heart.
Second, in the scene at the very beginning where Christian is having the bad episode in his room and thinking about things you have this line "I reminisced more about my encounters with death more than my encounters with life" which was BLOODY FANTASTIC and I thought I should point it out. There were others but that was the one I could remember word for word. Really well written.
Third. Ah the post-funeral angst scene. Again, so easy to slip into the trap of being overly-dramatic, but you're SO GOOD at writing this stuff, it comes so natural. And the way Christian starts to fall into himself, we all do it on at least some level, and we recognize it. But it's like this moment of relief when we see Trevor being able to pull him back out of it.
And I hate to tell you miss Patikins but there is SO MUCH SLASH POTENTIAL HERE because it's so romantic and sweet but it also holds together as a story perfectly well wuthout it so I will forgive you if there is no butt sex.
...but I think we would all enjoy it immensely if there was =)
Anyway, you break my heart, but you do it beautifully. Keep writing!

O it felt so good to get back with these characters. Not that they are having the best days of their lives or anything, not by a long shot, but you know how it is. You miss the characters you get attached to. And I am so horribly partial to Trevor. He has some great moments in this chapter. The slap was just as much of a surprise to me as it was to Christian, and I liked it like that. That act, coupled with his offer to move out to be around Christian, really revealed a lot more about Trevor and how his head is screwed on. Also I felt like the dialogue between them was really good, especially in the parking lot. It was very comfortable and it did not feel at all contrived because I can't tell you how many times I've been outside with people who are smoking and had that same...feeling. "good times" and nicotine jokes, I don't know, it made it very real. I liked having the scene outside of the hospital and out in the parking lot. Too much hospital scenes for some reason makes things dreary, it was good to mix it up.
BUT I did have one beef and that is that I am confused as to how the end up in the parking lot...it kind of jumps from talking in the hospital room to being outside smoking and I got confused.
But aside from that GREAT CHAPTER, I'm off to read the next one!

Wow. Patikins. Wow. I'm supposed to be studying for finals right now and not glued to a computer screen but it's been bugging me all day. Curiosity got the best of me and here I am at 2am reading this. And WOW.
Okay, so, first, a few of the details that were incredibly realistic and amazing and eerily familiar, maybe from Endings itself. When he gets in the tub with his clothes on...specifically his shoes. That scene is good. REALLY good. I had the picture right there in my head and I was right there with him in that odd moment. Like the shoes were reality but he was experiencing this horrible form of reality, the reality of the dying, etc. Wow. Okay. The sequence with the eye color. Knowing his eyes are blue but not seeing it. Really really powerful in conveying what was going on inside of Christian's head. And lastly, when he does the Heroin (dont get me wrong I have never done Heroin I have no idea what its like) felt really realistic, like we went off into heorin-land with him. Specifically the burying his head in a pillow. Good details and description of the weird ** trip and also when he realizes it didnt kill him, how it hits him and makes him sad and angry to have to scramble for another way to kill himself.
So, enough with the details, onto what actually happens.
Dialogue between Trevor and Christian: Romantic. Beautiful. Amazing. Horribly bittersweet and sad, with an odd glimmer of hope. But the ending doesn't really leave you with much hope, does it? The implication is that he dies, but there's this odd sense of love in the lines before it that the death can't really overshadow. It makes you smile which is so weird because why would I smile after reading about such a harrowing horrible experience? Answer: Patikins Pazuzu is a master of the written word.
So there was one thing I didn't like, and I think you should fix it right away.
BUTT SEX!
I love you Patikins Pazuzu. Thank you for sharing this with me and for being patient until I found time to read it. It's wonderful. =)