It ended? What?! That was no proper ending! D:

Great story, over all. There were a couple grammar/spelling mistakes I noticed, but other than that

i thought it was good, loved henry. but if you are going to do a second i think you should do something with james, like he starts liking another boy or something an henry starts getting jealous, cause it seemed to me henry didn't have much fellings for james it was more for rebecca and maybe we can see the fellings henry has for james this way, but apart more that it was really good, keep up the good work cant wait for the next one.

345th paragraph whats albeit?
I LOVED IT I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE SEQUEL!

1st paragraph though=thought
Did u meen to put conrads instead of congrats on the 28th paragraph?
36th paragraph shouldn't it be I not I'm
54th paragraph did u mean to put yeas?
JAMES IS REEALLY FUNNY!!I love the story!

1st paragraph finders=fingers
4th paragraph rally=realy
5th paragraph now=know
9th paragraph dose=does
11th paragraph wither=with her
18th paragraph the 3rd sentance is confusing
I LOVE IT!

33rd paragraph dose=does
62nd paragraph p= up i think
66th paragraph lie=like
70th paragraph you=your
I love it so much the story is realy interesting!

NO PROLEMS I'M SO HAPPY!*sniffle* Well the story is getting very good, and her mom isn't as funas a barrel of monkeys huh?? I wonder what's going to happen!?!?

Problems:47th paragraph mo=mom
>^.^< You had hardly any mistakes!I LOVE it its getting reealy good now!

Problems:4th line maker=make her
45th line batter=better
68th lline though=thought
69th line staring=starting
GOOD so far. I think its cool three way dating for Henry Rebbecca and James

Problems:1st paragraph shouldn't it be dancing cowS in tutus
4th paragraph the lain kinda makes the sentance confusing try to change that
15th paragraph batter is not the word your looking for
19th paragraph are coming not is coming
36th paragraph you out a space between hi s u want his
Other than that its realy good i realy like the cat stuff!

Problems: 1st paragraph two minuteS u forgot the s
3rd paragrap sizeable i am not sure about but it looks wrong...
What does Afore mean in the 14th paragraph
20th paragraph whats the t for
Other than that i LOVE it!
P.S. Sorry for all the critiquing, but I'm your friend and want you to have a very good non confusind word story^.^
(aren't I nice)haha

iT WAS A GOOD ENDING, I WAS LIKE WAITING FOR THE AUNT TO THEM KISSING. i ADORE JAMES THE MOST GOTTA SAY, HE REMINDS ME OF MY FRIEND CHRISTIAN. hOPE YOU DO THE SEQUEL
BTW BOWLING FOR SOUP AND FALL OUT BOY DO ROCK!! I LOVE THE SONG THAT THEY WERE SINGING AT THE BIGINNING:]

Well, aparently, I read a bit late.My bad, but I liked it just the same.I'm definatly ging to read more of your stuff...but now I'm going to be. Good Night!

Aw, too bad it`s the end. They never got to tell Rebbeca`s mother... and aunt :)

I liked it, but it's only the first chapter. I'm going o read the rest!