dude i no ur writing cliche in trainin n im readin tha 2 but u HAVE 2 update this it has A LOT OF POTENTIAL!seriously no kiddin...ill check back 2 c if u updated...jus motivate urself...with chocolate...*smile*

*grins* This story leaves some great openings to continue. I'm sure you'll update soon. And that was a very strong hint on my part.

This story is quite intriguing! I enjoyed the past two chapters, although David's POV kind of threw me off since I couldn't see what he had to do with Gabriel and all. But I guess we'll see a connection later in the chapters, ne? Anyway, update soon, this is definitely good work and quite original!

Hi! I really like reading your stories, all of them. Can't wait til you update them!

Interesting... Prefered the first chapter, but this was good too.

Looking forward to reading more. :)

Wow. Really wow. You have such amazing talent for writing! You completely pull me in. I couldn't dislike your stories if I wanted to. They're so real! I can't seem to get my stories like that, somehow. I really want to know what happens. REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY want to know what happens. I think I'm going to die of... of... IMPATIENCE! darnit. I love your characters!

Here goes nothing: Dude, this is kinda confusing! I've really got to reread this chapter later when I'm not tired then maybe it won't seem to be jumping all over the place... I hope... But other than that keep going! It's got a really different story line from your other writings and I like the way it's developing...- So keep it up! :)

Ironhart

hey this story is pretty good so far. you should continue to write on account if its anything like A Cliché in training then this will get even better as it goes on!

you are an excelent writer. i love all of your stories... this one though i really like...
keep up the good work.
Caitlin Marie

hiyaa..good chapter...very interesting..keep up the great work and update soon pleasee.

i like this story a lot and i hope you keep going.

good job
update soon

Awesome first chapter! Please do post more.

My only main comment would be... Shouldn't her reaction to being offered to write the screenplay be slightly bigger, and shouldn't a few more details be discussed?

Keep up the great work,

* Books4mE *

hey,
great way to start off a story
just wondering jess is a romance author and writes all these stories about relationships and all...but im wondering is she afraid to fall in love or is those romance books just a barrier between her and her wannabe love life...
idk but i do know this is gonna be a good story

p.s good name for a story

Aww, you know we'll love anything you throw at us! Keep on writing, this one sounds sexy :D