Alas. I had hoped that the inital confusion would be lessened. It really wasn't. And at the end, was that an Author note? I wasn't sure. Why do you need to wrap this story up when it has only just begun? But that is beside the point.

Back to what I usually do.

I am assuming that the first lines are about Ms Tear. Because she is the only character that we have been introduced to and thus, a reader feels the need to latch onto her as some sort of beacon. Insight to character is lovely and well done. Very poetic, which really makes me wonder: is this a novel of sorts or is it supposed to be poetry? Poetry is allowed to be more confusing than the straightforward novel is.
It is getting a bit better though, I see that Ms Tear has brown hair.
But please forgive me for still shaking my head and trying to understand. If there is more to this, I will check back and let you know how I am progressing with my confusion. Maybe you will change things in this story or maybe you won't. Not up to me, anyways.

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Firstly: The name is SightX. Feel fre to visit the profile if you want to know more than that.

Now that introductions are over with, here is my review:

I am utterly, utterly confused with this story. And I pride myself in being a smart human being. I don't really know where to start other than let me say: if the next chapter happens to explain--well, everything--then feel free to disregard this review.
You start off with a hook, trying to interest the readers. And your inital discription in the summary sounded lovely. But about nineteen words into this story, I was lost.
1. Where are we when this happens? I understand this is fantasy, but is it based in the real world, an alternate universe, a made up realm? You need to establish some sort of direction so that your readers (ie. Me) can get a bearing.
2. What in god's name is going on? Pretend that you are sitting at a table explaining this story to a friend. Pretend you aren't typing it out. What would you say to that friend?
You: "ok so there is this person--"
Your Friend: "Who?"
You: "Well.. I'll get to that. this person and a spark of light--"
Your friend: "you lost me."

You have no 'voice' here. There is no narrator, there is no main character here. (and yes, I am completely aware that you did introduce someone later on down the road..but this is assuming I can get past the beginning part. Which I did manage. Barely)
But moving on. So we 'meet' Ms Tear. Or maybe it isnt her? Because she is just described as 'she'. Which, since it comes after a line break, could be anyone. but She is attempting to access a file. She is denied, etc. I understand that part. Then 'she' asks "what happened?" and I completely agree with her. What, indeed?

My opinion is that you obviously are good at writing. Your vocabulary is interesting and dynamic. Your discriptions--though they do still confuse me--are well laid and outgoing. I think that maybe the next chapter will be better, though I'm not sure how many others will brave it and click that button.

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I say go for it!