"I probe the sky violently ‘till I finally grip the floor" i like this line. and like the other reviews mention, the last line throws the reader a little.

wow, the last line really blew me, i really wasnt expecting it.

beautiful wording. i don't know if this come naturally to you - and if it does, i envy you very very much.

'my body floats naked over a dea of black and white tile'

wow. keep it up man.

"My body floats naked on a sea of black and white tile

Baptism by fire"

I love that! And the last line made me giggle.