Sweet! It definatly drags you in! Your turn to review.

Hey this is pretty cool. nice cliff hangar in the end. As long as this story stays serious and creepy id love to put it in my C2.

aw comeon thats not nice cliff hanger much RAWR MUFFINS
DAH BANNANA CYU L8ER

I don't even want to know where this is going. Yet, I am strangely curious.

Yeah, it's rough, it's repetative, but ya' know what? BANANA! I'll fix it later.