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| Leonora Strong 2007-06-11 ch 1,  | abuseOh...Creepy. I like it...alot. Really, very good, descriptive, plus he's insane...with a girlfriend. Blood thirsty...yeah... This was very good. I loved it! ~Goschild |
| Alia Bright Child 2006-11-26 ch 1, | abuseHuh. I have to say, it's really good. Creepy, but then again, I've always loved reading creepy things. I like how you took the theme of being too scared to move from the beginning through to the end. It makes the story seem somehow, well, more alive, I suppose. I also like how you began it with the definition of fool, and then at the end, it sort of seems like Evangeline's the fool. All-in-all, it's very well-written. Cheers! ~Als |
| Alyra Myst 2006-11-23 ch 1, | abusei liked the difference between the mood at the beginning and the mood at the end. The beginning has a person who's in a strange place, terrified and doomed. the end has this creepy, "Hey honey i'm home, thanks for cleaning the corpse stains off the carpet" feel. very nice. I only noticed one spelling error: from the sink, where he was watching his hands. I also like how the killer seems almost innocent in how he acts, like what he's doing is the most natural thing in the world and there's nothing wrong with it. Very creepy. |
| rebeldork 2006-11-22 ch 1, | abuseThis is creepy--you named your villain after the cat that chomped on my arm at the shelter (did I tell you that story or not? I can't remember) and you have him purring. But is he have orange/red hair and a squished in face? Oh, so creepy. Oh, and speaking of creepy, this story is creepy. Ick, ick, ick. I mean, yeah, it's well-written and all, but remind me not to read any more of your horror, 'cuz it's full blown horror. Icky. |