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Reviews For: Broken Wings

The Jynx of Kari 2007-05-13 ch 1,	abuseStrong emotions running through this. Very well written. I like it. __Kari
xDistortedReALiTyx 2007-02-04 ch 1,	abuse...Amazing as usual...I'm not even sure what to say-I definitly fully relate to this right now...Keep it up-and i'm sorry it's been so long >.< But i hope to hear from you soon ^_^ --pammy--
Meikouhaikitsune 2007-01-24 ch 1,	abuseI liked the last couple of lines. For me it was saying don't let this get to hold a reign on you, quit staring at yourself like you barely exist. Look back up and keep going. That's always good though, to have someone you're able to live for. Nice wording.
simpleplan13 2007-01-15 ch 1,	abuseI like the rhyming... the second to last stanza is extremely powerful.. beautiful job
blacktearsof*innocence 2006-12-31 ch 1,	abusewow, very awesome imagry in this poem. like "black wings" and "my soul is burning" and i love the line "breathe sunlight dawn" its so awesome! you certainly have improved! i'm so proud! ^ ^ you are always very good with your imagry, your metaphors and simile's. i adore that in a writer. someone who can take words and transform them into pretty painted pictures in your mind. alive and exciting and passionate. very good, darling. and, it also flowed very smoothly, though there was no definite rhyming pattern, it still flowed nice. very good job! (thumbs up) keep writing. it's paying off! love always and forever, ~Davida ;D
Ben Wuest 2006-12-07 ch 1,	abuseI'm not even you: would you mind if I made these into lyrics? I so want to make this into a song! Where have you been? How have you been? Why haven't you updated for so long? You're such a love in my life, J... and I miss you. I leave for Nebraska City tomorrow. Cody and I broke up two nights ago, though, so I'm wondering if the vacation will be as "magically terrific" as I assumed. Funny thing is, there was a feeling in the back of my mind saying that something bad would happen. I guess it did. Here's the kicker; do you think something else will happen, or was the break-up all? I'm so terribly miserable; I have been these last couple days. I just don't know what I'm going to do without his company these next two weeks. So, Abby (my current "ultimate hag" - as Frankie calls her) added you on Myspace. That's cool. She's a neat person, and so are you. Perfect couple. I'm a Level Seven also in that Dante's Inferno Hell test. Nice job? I miss you so much, and I think about you so often nowadays. Do you think about me too, I wonder? Nevertheless, I really want you to consider letting me use these for lyrics; it's great writing. Nice job. I love you, still. B.
Hidden Lies 2006-12-04 ch 1,	abusePoor boy! hugs ahh well what can you do? I like this and the rhyming stanza at the end wraps it up nicely. Awesome!
Jess 2006-11-29 ch 1, anon.	abusewow josh... its... i... ah cant think wot 2 say =P... i luv it really! plz neva put down that pen... truely amazin stuff inside that head of urs... luv ya xoxoxox
Thrice 2006-11-28 ch 1,	abusenice... it's really good... though the commas annoy me Oo.. just a bit too many... but i really like this
Sweet-Tangerine50 2006-11-26 ch 1,	abuseAh beautiful. Very, very good.
Princess-anna57 2006-11-25 ch 1,	abusebouncynoises Hi Josh! Woot! I think this piece is gorgeous. Like Claire said, this sounds like a song! ^_^ I heart the ending especially. "So take a look back into my face,/It is there that you will/Find your place". Stunning work my friend! ^_^ Please keep writing/posting! Hopefully I'll have a piece posted soon! ~Anna~ ^_^
fragileHeart101 2006-11-22 ch 1,	abuseWhat a feling. im listening to that song right now. :) i love it josh.. i love your use of the big words. and then you tie it off just right :) well done. see you soon :) xoxoxox
S. Ben Beach 2006-11-22 ch 1,	abuseWow. I love the directiveness of the poem (is that even a word?) and the way that you alternate imagery with it as well. It has that usual edge of suspense carried out really well.. I'd be very grateful if you could look at my work as well. =)
Autumn Reflections 2006-11-21 ch 1,	abuse:D this is awesome josh!! Reads more a like a song than a poem, especially with the word 'gunna' in it, shudders...deadly unna? It is really beautiful and emotional, favs? i think so. Keep writing (and smiling!) Autumn.
Katie poo 2006-11-21 ch 1, anon.	abusewow. i really like that. i think i know what its about too :) love this bit: "Black wings evolved from broken..." awesome stuff joshy - as always. LOVE YOU! XOX

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