Okay first off your writing looks good as in punctuation and grammar. Though some of the sentence structure needs a bit of work.
Example: "In the beginning of the world of Validor all magic was free and unbound." is a little off if I were you I would try and rewrite it. Okay my question is about the elementals that confuses me to no end. Are you use elemental for lack of a better term or are these actual elementals that can change shape to me an elemental is and element that has gathered itself into a life force. I am also a little confused about what these plains are I hope you will explain more about them. My overall suggestion to alleviate confusion is create a glossary with words and characters and stuff it would also be helpful for people returning to the story after a break.

Hee hee! I thought I might returned your past kindness with a review of my own. Well, that's what I planned to say, but this really was a pleasure to read.
The world you created is so wonderfully vivid; it draws you in immediately. I especially love the fire creatures and the descriptions you offered! (Kurt also seems very cool, but I don't want to come off as the devil's advocate...at least not yet, anyway.)
The only criticism I can offer is that it is sometimes a little hard to read. I would probably go back and look for places to sprinkle in a few commas, and get rid of some of the sentence fragments.
Thanks so much for the pleasure of a compelling plot and inspired characters. Be proud! This is really brilliant!
-O. D. Scribbler

This is kind of confusing, putting in proper names of weapons and other items with out declaring the item in the same sentence. For example you could change the sentence. Vidra felt one respond and drew Karis The Dominator. To Vidra felt one respond and drew her pipe, Karis The Dominator. Other then confusion it is good and quite compelling.

This chapter is really good. I am so happy to hear that you have updated your story again because i love reading it and all your other fantastic ones! Well Done. You are a great writer!

Too much theory about the magical world all in that short bit made me a tad confused :(
It lacked a bit of subjectiveness in the character.
The introduction was not as capturing and enchanting as it could have been. The first bit tried to summarize too much in the paragraph and the later bits had too much description in the introduction, which could have been pushed back a little further. I mean most people would read a bit to decide - so the start has to be memorable and emotional too.
It seems interesting and fantasized though, which gave an eerie feeling.
Anyhow. Cheers.

Wow. I let this chapter sit too long before reviewing... SORRY!!

Anyway, a lot of important information in this one. I like the fact that Karis and Duran pursue this kind of quest because it shows that they aren't willing to just sit around, they want to actively help Ilaya. Also, the stairway and room and dragon were nicely done.

I love this story! The author deserves a medal! What an amazing story!

This is Fantastic! I love Karis! she is amazing! This story just hast to be the best i have ever read! I am reccomending to everyone i know!

This is amazing! it is the best story i have ever read! It is nail-biting and always keeps me interested! I love how the writer gives such a good sense of the characters. Very good detail! I can't wait to find out what happens next. The writer of this story is fab and deserves some sort of author award!

Amazing! You totally captured my imagination.

However you didn't mention the girl's name or what she was doing on the other plane thing.

Apart from that great.

Wow, that was an intense chapter at the end there. There's something about the world you've created for this story that sparks my imagination; it's cool. I was a little confused at one spot where I think Duran and Karis were talking but because it was all lumped into one paragraph I couldn't tell who was saying what or if it was all just Duran talking. It might help if you make sure to start a new paragraph every time it's a different person talking. Other than that it was a great chapter!

Wey-hey! I'm back to read the new chapters! Finally... Yep. I'm slow. Sorry about that. Anyway...

What happened to Danan when they got to the safer plane and met up with Anari. It's like he just disappeared until he conveniently reappeared at the tower. Just curious. Btw, I like the ceremonial robes, they sound cool.

This chapter was good in that it gave me some of Karis' background. It's a sad story, but good that you found a way to share it so that your readers learn more about Karis.

cool. bit confusing but cool
love the elimental part. i'm hooked. if you made that a book it wouled be brill

So far its good. It is very intriguing which is good cause it means people will keep reading hopefully. Your grammar and spelling is good. Though in a few places it looked like you left out a word or too. So you should defiantly go back and read through it. The actual story is good overall, I was a little confused at first but by mid second chapter I felt my confusion disappear keep writing I would love to see how this story develops. One last thing maybe you might want to spend just a little more time on introducing us to Karis, since i sense her being the main character. If you plan for that to be later that works too, it's still early so just about anything works at this point.

I love the originality of the world you're creating with this story; it's utterly intriguing. The title of the story is great too because it provides a hint of what to expect while being eye-catching at the same time. It totally captures my imagination.

The one thing I find truly missing is that there isn't much a narrative voice (I mean there is; it's just inconsistent which makes it kind of monotone). There's no excitement or anxiousness or any other underlying emotion to it; especially in the opening paragraph. You come very close to developing a voice with lines such as "In the beginning of the world of Validor all magic was free and unbound" and "The fifth they bound and called the Voidmark". These lines create a very dignified voice that sounds like it believes the events it describes to be ominous and important and makes me accept what I'm being told as the reality of this world; but that voice is broken with lines like "However this meant that many could use it for evil and did causing a great war. So after the war the greatest adepts in the Marks of Fire, Ice, Lightning and Earth bound it" which is suddenly a very casual voice that doesn't seem to have much opinion about the history it's relating to me. Because the voice sounds apathetic, it makes me feel like you're glossing over important information, which you really aren't. It might help if you try to imagine the voice you want in your head and read the story aloud with that voice. If any lines you read break you out of that voice, then rewrite them until they match up. (Just a suggestion, feel free to ignore me.)

I love the little scene break symbol you use! It's perfect: an upside down 'V' for Voidmark that also looks like an upward pointing arrow which references the fact that it's on the rise. It's like your entire title all in that one little symbol. So cool...

The fact that you start the action after your introduction with a character who is being lost to the Void is instantly engaging, it totally draws me in and makes me interested. Details like the magic symbols crawling along the blade and her hand are perfect; I could practically see them. I also like that Vidra, in just the first chapter, is a complex enough character to make the decision that she wants to die rather than be lost to the magic and is sort of pushing herself to the very limit.

The battle is a very dramatic introduction to Karis, but it was kind of confusing. If it is merely a battle of wills, why does Vidra slump to the floor? Is she exhausted? Maybe a couple physical details would help clear that up. Anyway, it was all very interesting, bordering on intense (that's a good thing).

I hope you continue this because I think the ideas and the magic that you're creating are wonderful and make a great story premise with awesome plot potential!