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| Not Quite Dry Eyed 2007-06-03 ch 1,  | abuseThis is so real it's wonderful. I love the forth stanza especially "black/white fingers clench a sheet that covers too much&too little." Your writing is very unique I like it. I've read a few other things (didn't review them because everything I could have said would have been repetative of other reviews. I do like your style and I look forward to reading more. Keep writing forever and always Not Quite Dry Eyed |
| Melos Atriensis 2007-02-11 ch 1, | abuseI like the kind of chaotic feeling to this piece. As in, "she almost remembers, maybe, was wrong" gives the poem a really confused feeling. (There was a lack of subject, but that's besides my point.)It's like, she knows it's wrong, and she knows she'll regret it, but still she doesn't stop it. VERY relatable. I like the visuals too, particularly "fake virility evident in her stripped thighs." Ah, it reeks of realism. I love it. I'm not sure I really like the slashes, but that could be just a personal thing. But I love how you ended the piece. Really, great job. Keep writing and stuff! Scarlett |
| doxology 2007-01-22 ch 1, | abuseInteresting. I like the title, and my favorite line was ,"but dear god she's scared of what could happen between the lines of cigarettes." Great job. Peace and Love ~> Lifted |
| KittenX 2007-01-04 ch 1, | abuseThis poem reads like an abstract painting. Not in a sense that it's hard to understand but, it's just so real, and harsh, and edgy, the realism is striking. I could definitely get something out of this to which I could relate. |
| art by sola 2006-12-17 ch 1, | abusemm, yes, it's wordy, but perfectly so. i can't pick on anything so i'll just say well done! |
| Second-Hand-Screamo 2006-12-07 ch 1, | abuseThere's this sense of sinking regret and giving in to this piece. It's REALLY wordy, which both helps and hinders, but I like it. :) |
| Alexis Albery 2006-11-27 ch 1, | abuseThis is written wonderfully and I love the emotion and vision it envokes with so few words. Lovely job! |