Cool! I love this! The only thing I din't like was that it was kinda hard to read die to the formatting... you posted it under poetry, but it's written as a paragraph... Other than that, which isn't really your fault cause formatting on here can be a pain some times, Great job!

AMAZING! I loved it. Its almost chilling in a way and it sounds lyrical as well. Could quite possibly be a song? Its really great, I look forward to reading more of your work.
-Avery

This poem was very well written: the only problems I found with it are technical ones.

They are, however, rather large: You need stanzas/paragraphs/lines of some sort to make this easier to read. You should also have a summary of the poem (if you don't sumarize, few people are intriguied by it).

Some parts were difficult to read and understand: "to fear what you may see which be the truth", et cetera.

Otherwise, great word choice, theme, use of metaphor, and all in all a creative and enjoyable poem.

~Bitter Irony

It's a really great poem. The feeling is great but you need to work on format. Other than that it's a really great poem with fantastic lines riddled in it and a pretty great message to think about

Bloody Hell that is good! Haunting in fact, I love your use of repetition and questioning (I'm being smart today!)Could have been set out in a way thats easier to read but that was excellant! Keep writing!
~Hope~