I like the juxtaposition of death being compared to life, where you say that death will "bloom." Very interesting, very clever.

Yar!
Ack!
That was very full circly and very concise...
Gah!
My exclamations say that this is a favorite.
awesome poem

Hot damn.

Short, sweet(...?), and crystal clear. I don't mean that the subject was transparent, I mean that you described everything really simply which is nice.

Plus it's a really neat concept. I could imagine all of that seeping and springing. I'd like to note that adding a color into the mix was a smart move. Colors can set a mood and tone instantaneously, and in this case it opened a floodgate in my mind.

I LUV YOU! Ahem. I mean, good job! I'd be thrilled to read more poetry like this. Hint hint...

Very nice, in a sort of creepy way. Hard to explain, but so is death, I guess.
You're a very talented poet.

Although I might be wrong, my impression of the poem is this:

Putting death in a box and waiting for it to spring means that death would happen at random, rather than having the effects of aging slowly take hold of a person. The fact that it's in an open tomb seeping slowly may mean that instead it does take hold of a person little by little and shows it's effects and grasp as time passes.

Hope I got that right, haha! Either way, good for a short little piece.

~Cirien Phoenix

P.S. Thanks for the review on "Touch Assignment." When I'm back to the computer I normally use I should have an update for that in the next week or two. Glad to see you're really enjoying it. While I didn't intend for it to be overly reminiscient of Kingdom Hospital, I can definitely see why you feel that way. Also, I'm happy to see I'm playing into multiple fears of your's! Hope you continue to enjoy the story as I update more!

Ooh, I liked that! Short, simple, but nicely put together. Great work.

Awesome.
I like the comparison
of death
and spring.

Even though they're total opposites.
They mesh
quite well.

Great job. ^^

o I like it...

Wow...I don't even know what to say. This was very well written! I love it!

Cool, this is a nice poem. I like the way it rhymes, and the second to last line gives the feeling it slowly takes you over as opposed to very suddenly. The last line gives it a more of a positive connotation, probably because of using the words softly and bloom. But I like it. :)

Wonderful :)

I also got chills from this. It's beautiful and yet morbid. Very well done. But why did you choose this title?

Hey there, that was an awesome poem, a really beautiful analogy of death. I loved it. Cheers.

I love the rhyming in this -- it's simplistic and sort of lullaby-ish, but the poem itself is haunting. And I love the image of death in the second stanza, like a cross between a flower and smoke. I really liked this and I'm adding it to my favorites. Keep writing.

I like the flow of this piece and the dark imagery. Reading this gave me goosebumps… and that’s a good thing. I also had the strangest feeling of déjà vu as I read this piece, like I had read this before. Anyway, keep up the good work!