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Reviews For: Flight

Updraftgirl38 2007-03-13 ch 1, anon.	abuseHey, I asked on Livejournal for links to your stuff a while ago and read this but RL got in the way of commenting. Anyway, I'm doing it now! I'm really glad I asked to see this; it's wonderful! It's an interesting snapshot into this world you've created. You give enough detail so we know who the characters are and what they look like without going into paragraphs waxing on about the colour of their eyes. I love the first bit; the description of flight. I could really feel it, the way you started off with them ignoring the air patterns then settling down to soar. It seems like there was research behind it. Oh, and I liked the little detail about the different birds their wings were modelled after and how it affected their flight. I think it's really neat how you've modelled this "Alternate Earth". The strange angels aren't universally accepted but aren't hated by everyone. The description of Lucinda facing the mob was really well done as well. I could see her in my mind mantling her wings and looking all fierce. It's also fun to find the little details about the avian parts of their appearance. You don't just load it all on the reader at the beginning, but slip it in along the way. It's really well done. I like how Matthew cheers her up. The description of it is incredible and the bit of banter after is fun. I would try and give some constructive criticism to balance out my fangirling above, but I've got nothing! It's a wonderful piece and I'm off to read the others!
Rosemarine 2006-11-24 ch 1,	abuseVery interesting and unique. You can write well and there weren't anygrammatical errors that I noticed. You leave a lot of questions unaswered though, like how these two 'angels' are related to each other, age, and where they come from. I imagine, or hope at least, you go into detail about their civilization because I'm sure it would be very interesting. It's fresh, which is hard to comeby sometimes. Just don't forget to give your characters some depth, 'K?
Laura 2006-11-24 ch 1, anon.	abuseHey, I like it, I want to know more so please continue :)

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