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| Kelaia 2007-08-31 ch 4,  | abuseAnother interesting chapter, thanks for updating! It works quite well having short sections from each event, but sometimes I find it moves a bit quickly and therefore becomes quite confusing. Maybe thats just me though. Still a good story, keep writing please! |
| Kelaia 2007-01-11 ch 3, | abuseWell written, but I'm just a little confused. If she's MI5's progidy, why are they trying to get her to leave? Maybe all will be explained in the next chapter...? And I don't feel sorry for Lucas at all! I know what its like fighting lads who think all girls are weak. Update, please! |
| Alia Bright Child 2006-12-06 ch 2, | abuseIt's good. It's just on the short side for my liking. Who's Andreah, btw? And was she the one that went to school with Lucas or was Lauren the one that went to school with Lucas? I'm just a little confused. Keep writing though! ~Als |
| Kelaia 2006-12-05 ch 2, | abuseSo short! :( Very good, though. You set the scene very well. Update, please! |
| Kelaia 2006-11-28 ch 1, | abuseI think I'm going to like this story :) Nice style of writing, and good spelling/grammar. Update, please! |
| Alia Bright Child 2006-11-26 ch 1, | abuseHey, good start. I like the brevity of it, even though I'm normally a detail hound. I'll definitely look forward to reading more. It almost seems a little bit similar, in a way, to the story I'm writing. (If only FP would let me upload it...) Update soon! ~Alia |
| Moonlite Star 2006-11-25 ch 1, | abusegood start, although it could be longer. I'm adding you to my C2. Hope that's ok with you. if not, lemme know and I'll delete ya. |