OH MY GOODNESS! WHO DID THAT? WHO TOLD? I GOTTA KNOW! I GOTTA KNOW NOW! I MUST KNOW! PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ WRITE MORE NOW!
galaxyruler122490

ah! so sad! so sad! a lyson kiss! yay! sorry..i think they're cute together...:D:D:D:D:D! this story...is a lot less rushed than the others...i really like it! write more soon!

o! Damon is mad! awe! they are such the perfect couple...i'm gonna make a chipper...how about lyson?..i like that...lyson! such a cute couple! yay! sorry! i love it so far...keep on writing!

LEANDRA SO TOTALLY LIKES TYSON! IT'S SO OBVIOUS! awe...WHAT HAPPENED TO SHARLOTTE? iwanna know! keep on writing!

i think someone likes tyson! lol! u can tell leandra likes him...just what does he look like? j/c...keep on writing!
galaxyruler122490

i like how this is back in time..i like that idea! i love caston too! it's kool! it was too short though...oh well!
galaxyruler122490

I loved it! Great chapter!! And unlike what other people are saying, I don't think that it's rushed at all! Keep up the good work!! Please update soon!

Great job!! I know that I keep saying this, but I love Tyson and Leandra! Please update soon!

this is a start to a great story but it is kinda hard to catch up. everything is moving so fast and the chapters are short. not that im complaing of chapter lenght; im just saying there isnt much detail and everything is rush. im sure you can do better. i read sacrifice and that was good. for a person who just started reading this story( like me) its hard to comprehend everything when its all so rushed together. a bit more detail would be great. a good well written lenghtly chapter is better than just a short abrubt undetailed one. i wont mind waiting for an update if the chapters were satifing eventhough it takes a longer time to write.
~good luck, i enjoyed the plot line.
~Nickel

I think you have a good idea here, but you rushed everything. I mean, slow down and take the time to actually tell your story. Don't try to rush through it, and don't be afraid of making it too long. Give us some details, some background, some Stories. Overall though, I think you could turn this into a very good story. Good job and keep writing. :)

That was a really good chapter! I just love Tyson and Leandra!! And I loved Tyson's line at the end!! It was so funny! Please update soon!

Oh! Cliffhanga! LOL.

Good story and descriptiveness is woven into the dialogue and simple actions. Intriguing piece! Keep at it and finish it, you'd be assured that I'll read them.

-Helen

PS I love love interests.

OMG!! What happened to Sharlotte?!?!? PLEASE UPDATE SOON! I have to know what happens! PLEASE, I BEG YOU!

"Neither ones was paying attention..."

- I think that was a typo. Just pointing it out.

the dialogue between Joseph and Jeanette could have been lengthened alot if you added longer actions like them walking around or looking at something besides the "he sighed", "she frowned" kind of stuff.

Besides that i am very interested in this story and will definately be looking out for it. Jeanette seems like a very selfless character to be giving her daughter away so she can have a better life. I like that idea. Update soon!

~ Nobody Wants Reality ~

Hurry it up. I'm waiting. :)

Intriguing title and beginning.