this is actually one of the best poems that i have ever read..everything is perfect, wouldnt change a thing

This was a great poem, nothing rhyming-wise seems forced. On the other hand, the repetition of tattered and torn almost seemed forced. It was meant to be repeated, I'm aware, only it just didn't seem to flow as much as the rest of the poem. But overall, great job.
--Ally

It's heavy on the emotion which is good. A couple of times the rhyme sounded forced but it's a good poem regardless but a lot of the lines were memorable.

Write on

~~Tesa

Very well written, and it has a great sense of rythym.
Many poets choose to forgo rythym for freestyle, but there is no poem like ones written like it was set down to be.

Great work, it was miserable, but I liked it.

DynamicEquilibrium

I love the rhyme of this poem keep it up!