I like this one. It creates a dark place of terror and sadness as I read it. Short as it is, I can see everything and almost smell the dank prison.

Maranwe

is this about the starving children in africa you were talking about on your front page? it was...interesting to say the least. it reminds me of so many things...

-Irony' . .

"tortured lunatics driven thoroughly beyond hope"

writers? or artists? withering away for lack of craft and because supplies are so overpriced.

really, though this speaks to me. it's dark but in a sardonic sense. or maybe that's just lack of sleep talking back.

in any case, i like it.

Ooh ... creepy. The last paragraph is powerful. The word choice, delivery, everything.

It could give you the shivers ...

Your Faithful,

Baxter.

Wow... this is a very promising beginning. It really gets my attention and, I wonder, are you going to write anymore on it? If you do, be sure to let me know.

Hang 'em and watch them die!

Next time, before you put anything up on fictionpress, ask yourself, 'What does this mean?' and also 'Is this really any different than anything I can roandomly read on fictionpress?'

What are the answers to those questions?

Well, unless the answers are, 'This means ...' and 'yes' then dont put it up.

ciao

-Faye coon

Since it's so breif- there's not much of a review I could give. Except, it seems very well written for it's short-self. It has potential to be something REALLY chilling. Keep it up 3