Reviews for The Girl that Tried

Divine Writer 2007-05-28 ch 1,	abuseyeah your right, too many poems on the sad side.
ToppyoushiKoneko 2007-02-27 ch 1,	abuseWow that's deep! I like it.
pinkxbutterflies 2007-02-12 ch 1,	abuseLooks good, filled with hurt and pain. Suicide is such a ** way to go.
Midnight In Eden 2007-02-11 ch 1,	abuseI know a lot of poets here are anti-punctuation but I really think this poem and it's flow would benefit from it. Otherwise try to use more line breaks to achieve a more coherent flow. It's a bit too direct for my tastes too. You tell the reader too much rather than showing. I think a little more imagery, a few parallels would help bring this to life. .:midnight:.
steinbock 2006-12-14 ch 1,	abusealright, i liked it, it had a nice sense of finality to it... an odd serenity that comes from simply relaxing, for the last time... shudders it was a very nice poem, actually... gave a nice view of the scene and her serenity as she does one final act, I really like how you mention the music in the background :) that's cool! but one thing i noticed... what bed are you talking about? I thought the rest of the poem took place in her car, and now she's lying on a bed? Just seems a little inconsistent to me... or maybe i missed something? anyways, keep up the great writing!