I really like the way you worded this piece. I can feel the emotion radiating from it. Great job!

Wow. This is really good. I love the way you wrote the whole poem as if she was an impenatrable fortress, and then you end it in such a contradictory way... Just... wow. Just wow. :P LoL Good job and keep it up.

P.S. Thanks for your review . I love getting them.

Tender Hostility

I really loved this, especially the first four lines and the last line... though, when you say impregnable... I think you might mean inpenatratable. Inprgnable means able to get pregnant...but all in all, this was a wonderful poem.

Kudos... i added this to my favs.

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Although this poem doesn't seem like something I would usually like, it works really well. Keep writing!

Kind of sounds like something I might write...

Nice job.