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| BrokenHeartedAngel 2007-03-16 ch 1,  | abuseuh wow good job kinda ya know creepy but yea whatevder goodjob |
| Sakka-Fenikkusu 2006-12-06 ch 1, | abuseMacabre, horrifying, and delightful. I love it. |
| Qwara 2006-12-05 ch 1, | abuseWow--this is one disturbing story. o.o I like how you laid the story out, and the short paragraphs give it an interesting feel. Still, I'm not completely in love with this story. It might just be because suicide and teenage angst isn't really my thing, which isn't really your fault--but nonetheless, I didn't really sympathize with the main character. I knew I was supposed to pity her, but instead I just saw that she was being way melodramatic. Yeah, her schoolmates were mean to her, the quarterback lied, etc., but you've still got to take responsibility. She didn't take responsibility for her actions. What was she doing with a jerk like the quarterback in the first place? Why'd she give in? It takes two to tango. You have a nice writing style, but I would love to see you write on a subject a bit less morbid, and perhaps try to make characters less polarized? ^^ |
| Broken Petals 2006-11-29 ch 1, | abuseGod. I can't even describe how completely incredible this was. That last line was so powerful and. . . >_O Wow. You are a fantastic writer. . . *claps* |