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| Razi Celosia 2006-11-28 ch 2,   | I love your characters voice, she's such a teenager. I'm so glad she isn't the typical "don't pick a fight with me or I'll mess you up" kinda girl most authors pair with the dark clothing. Your whole idea of the 3 friends being so difficult is also enticing. I also like that you're not making Victor be the "Hot, sexy, new guy that everyone falls in love with". On the contrary, he seems to be scared and rather less than attractive. You used a wolf as her animal-form, which is typical, but understanding since wolves do kick **. Your changes compared to so many other stories are refreshing though. Keep up the good work! |