Whoa, what a chapter!
Thank you for updating, I really couldn't wait to read it.
Confused mishap? I like the expression ^_^ and poor Skyler, he so freaked out after it had happened. Haha! And I liked the way you showed him humming some tunes in the office, with everybody ogling him and him being oblivious to it, lol.
No Raynie this time? Aww ...
Great chapter, please update as fast as you can!

Lawl! Her name is Lawler. XD Chatspeak...sorry...


"If I wanted to be around people who acted like that, I’d spend the day in a locker room full of PMS-ing high school girls!" Oh famouse last words. :P


Look you **?! Not very professional...but appropriate?


XD Attacked by hookers. Dear god.


I HATE YOU! ;-; I can't write in 3rd person and you can. :smacks you with a wooden spoon: DIE **! (Just kidding. Please don't. I love you. :snuggles:)

xo

Ahahha. Raynie is my hero. His clothes are amazingly awesome. :P


(I'm serious, too you know...)


xo

*gasp* I see how it is. Those chapters are dedicated to OTHER people, but nothing, simply nothing is decicated to Mr. Izzy Fabulous? YOU ARE MY ** HAG, I DEMAND RECOGNITION. Haha. But anyways, despite all that, the story is going awesome so far. Lol, I'm LOVING the outfit Raynie was wearing, I'll have to get someone to draw that out for me and I'll hang it on my wall. And I love the contrast between Skyler and Raynie, how Skylers all serious, like he has a stick up his **, and Raynies so free and playful. Good work, and keep it up love! Te amo! Loves,
~!*Mr. Izzy Fabulous*!~

Oh, thank you!
I loved the chapter an this new guy, Raynie. He seems an oddball but in a positive meaning. I'm glad you finally decided to put the new chapter, it's great. I only regret it's so short, I would love to see more of the interaction between the always so uptight Skyler and the free bird (so it seems) Raynie.
Can't wait to see another chapter. Good job my dear!

Interesting story from the summary and I think you can take your plot somewhere. A few spelling and grammar mistakes, but those are to be expected and can easily be fixed.

My one suggestion is to have made the prologue longer. You have so much information to give, and it could be clearer if it was longer, had more about Skyler maybe as opposed to the vague overlook, like how was he before the dreams? Happier? In love with a woman? And your line that the reader will find out everything with Skyler would be better as the ending point, since it is a seque into the first chapter. Overall a very good story that shall be interesting.Understand that every suggestion I make is based on my own writing style, and may not be very helpful to yours.

A: I seem to remember you saying you were a bad writer the first or so time we talked or something. LIES I TELL YOU! LIES! (If you did. XD)

B: I love the title incorporating his name.

C: And you have me hooked. ^^ Yay! Great beginning :D

As I said when I read this the first time, it's a great start. I'd love to see more of this!