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One-Hand Clap 2008-03-31 ch 1,	abuseDisturbing, definitely, but oh my God... It's amazing. I don't know. It chills all cold in my center. It just resonates. The haunting image at the end of slaves, kings, and her - this screaming plump child, the queen. Helen Kidnapped is haunting. Helen Kidnapped is a humane, attempted rationalization of pedophilia. I only say 'attempted' because it's something I could never understand. Thank you for trying, though. It musn't've been a nice place to go.
Gollummullog 2007-06-26 ch 1,	abuseHm... I'm sure there's a metaphor here that I'm missing, what with all the imagery. sigh I wish for talent like yours. Great work.
Marx Garza 2007-01-15 ch 1,	abuseThis is shocking, impressive and captivating. Good Poem.
no.peace.los.angeles 2006-12-19 ch 1,	abuseOh my God, from the very first line of this, I was hooked. The sexuality in this and your metaphors...and I'm just shocked speechless. This is one of the best pieces I have read in a LONG time. It's so controversial, and that's what makes it such a guilty read. I love it, though, and am adding it to my favorites. And here I thought the drabble I'm currently working on is blasphemous...Beautiful breathtaking work. Keep writing! :)
Ashelin 2006-12-13 ch 1,	abuseOh gosh, I wanted to stop reading, but I couldn't. I think it is illegal to make people hooked like that. Wow. I mean, it was so terrible, so excruciatingly true. It made me so angry, wow, just wow. Amazing, what more can I say? -Ashelin
Aneliz Rei 2006-12-11 ch 1,	abuseGood lord. Horrifying. Mesmerizing. Impressive. ::favorites::
Peach Rose Orchid 2006-12-03 ch 1,	abuseThis poem is...I mean it really strikes you to the center, making you just cringe in disgust and fear. But the way it's described also gives it this animalistic sensuality that for some reason no one can tear their eyes away from. I don't mean this in a perverted "this is cool" kind of way. Just...you can't look away.
hellbentheretic 2006-12-01 ch 1,	abuseWow, this is quite vivid indeed. The smattering of images come together like paint on a canvas. This man that wants to dominate her is a beastly brute that seems to care nothing for her, but to deflower her virginity. My question is this: Is she scared that if she doesn't do this he will do it to her anyway i.e. rape her? This may already be occuring and I just can't see it right now. I love the disriptions especially in the last two parts. It seems to me that she wants this as well, but of course is frightened b/c it is her first time. The innocense of her is kidnapped and will be changed forever after this encounter. Will she be the same afterwards? My guess is that eventually, yes, she will be, but for the last line 'and when she cries, you smile thinking that it is from joy.' As for the format I can't tell if this is poetry or just a short blirb from something larger. I still enjoyed it though. good good, hellbentheretic
in a jar pk 2006-12-01 ch 1,	abusebrill imagery; i missed reading your work. x
Guardrail 2006-11-30 ch 1,	abuseThis is such an amazing piece. The feeling and the imagry are alive and so well written. I love this, keep up the stunning work.
Tabi Berkey 2006-11-30 ch 1,	abusewow. is this by any chance helen of troy? either way, it's still amazing! i love your work...keep it up!
teh tarik 2006-11-29 ch 1,	abusethis is just completely stunning. behind all that dark perverseness there is just this sick demented beauty. The last stanza was especially wonderful.
cocaine and cherries 2006-11-29 ch 1,	abuseohmy. you always capture the essence of the darker side of sexuality and sensuality. I love that last paragraph. Presumptuous, and impartial. we are nothing but our pride, and our fragile ego's.
Julius Gillian 2006-11-28 ch 1,	abuseYou're work is very profound, moving, poignant, and excitingly disturbing. I must admit, I'm not so acutely aware of every message you've presented in your poetry. I'm still in high school, a mere age of sixteen since August, so I'm at a disadvantage with the abundant amount of knowledge you present here and elsewhere. However, I loved the description. I loved how you transported yourself into this kidnapper and interpretted the kidnapping in his eyes. How strangely enough, it was a beautiful thing to him. This rape, this misinterpretation he's been mourning for all his life. I'm unsure if I'm following the right train of thought, although poetry can be interpreted in different formats just like two races can view the same thing differently, so that's my view in this. It's not enough to say good job and well done, as your other reviewers seem to grasp your profound and natural ability with poetry. This was, as I mentioned, beautifuly done to a high degree. I admire your use of depth in such brevity. That's what I'm going to reread this again and again until I understand it. "kiss this child with too much beauty. You claim this child. She calls you king, and in your kingdom of slaves you call her queen." These lines alone, for instance, give me a lot about how the male side of our human race operates. I especially see this cynical and yet truthful reality when you write 'kingdom of slaves'. I see the lies, croons, and taunts men use to get their women. And when they have them, as you recalled, good and ripe like fruit. You've created something wonderful again, I'm surprised to see it in this format because you've always had few words per stanza but like a long line of thought. haha oh well, I loved this. I enjoy your poetry because there is something to think about. I enjoy your poetry, because like a masterful novel, when you reread the book, you discover something new you overlooked, misunderstood, or thought of a different way. I'm sure these stanzas were meticulously planned by yourself as well. I wonder though, in your point of view, how you percieve the world of men? I hope it's not totally cynical and absolute that you don't see hope anymore. I recall in your subdiscription you wrote: Helen kidnapped is plump and nude above you. Like this poem, I don't fully understand it. Haha, but I can still appreciate it. I walk away from this poem and feel a depression mixed with pity. I feel, slightly angry. The pity comes from those who've not had a successful and social life as they would've liked to, whatever their disadvantage is. But for the stupid, I am angry that they resort to these methods of ruining someones life. Many girls, as I read in a book called Reviving Ophelia by Mary Phipher, it can ruin and put mental scars on a girls life... Anyway, I'll stop whoring your review board and let you do whatever it is you do (want to get to doing) :P Thanks for sharing this, kudos! See you around~ - Julian

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