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trash can art 2006-12-11 . chapter 1
I did not expect this ending. Nice job with it. I liked the 'mafia is thicker than water' bit. It actually feels a bit out of place in that stanza, but I like it nonetheless. Maybe you could move it somewhere else? It works well with the concept you have here. It just doesn't seem to click with its stanza.
shaddowcat 2006-11-29 . chapter 1
o: ho-dang, that was really entertaining.
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