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crappitrash 2006-12-12 . chapter 1
would you in anyway classify yourself as a surrealist?

the faery does not in any way seem like a cliche--well done, this.
Ryan Schiff 2006-12-08 . chapter 1
That line about staining chocolate on a child? Really the least poetic thing I've ever read. Sorry but it really is terrible.

Otherwise it's overall a very nice but it seems to drag on at the end. You could easily have gotten the message across in less lines.
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