Even though it's been a bit since I've read this story (which I'm so terribly sorry for), I immediately got right into the story line, the characters, everything. I love this :) Keep up the great work!

~Carm~

Interesting story line. I'm left curious why Time decided to pay Diane a visit and share with her the story of Charlotte, but I'm sure that secret is set to be revealed later. Nice job.

~Divine Macabre

This is a wonderful story so far! You've got great characters, an great plot line, and have a way with words. Keep this amazingness up :)

~Carm~

Whee! its LS! heres your review, i thought i would review one that doesnt have a review so yuss. lets see...

"It was devoid of any color except black, but yet seemed to have been colored in like most portraits."

After your comma, you put "But yet" i would put one or the other, they dont sound right together :P i would go for yet.

"“Can I come in?” her mother called, and the girl nodded."

Take away "The girl Nodded" it has no reason to be there.

“Yes, I did,” the girl nodded, almost as tall as her mother, standing at 5’6”.

uhh... O.o you mentioning her height is very random and out of place, i would take it out.

Other then that, spelling and gammer is wonderful, though i did see some comma's that need to be replaced by periods :P

i think the storyline is interesting, i only wished i could hear his story and know who charlotte is!

so yes, my review! enjoy! ^^