Very good chapter! I'm eager to know what's going to happen next. Please add more soon!

~Anna

I liked the first paragraph. You gave us just enough information on Faye to get us interested, but not so much that it's *too* much. If that made any sense.

What's so special about swordsmen, besides the fact that they rarely show up here? Legend, maybe? (You don't have to add that. Just me voicing my thoughts as I read. Actually, it's probably better if you don't dump that on us right at the beginning.)

Faye seems friendly. Maybe a little too friendly, but talkative characters can be fun to read. If it was me I probably wouldn't have bothered going down to the swordsman, but it appears that I'm slightly more antisocial than Faye is. Oh yeah, and I love the name. =D

A good start. There was a lot of action to draw the reader in, and I thought you set the scene well.

Oh, wow! This was so incredible! I can't wait for more!

This is get'n GOOD ^_^ Talk about a cliffhanger! Please upload the next chap soon :)

Wow! Good chapter! It really had me on the edge of my seat and waiting to know what was going to happen! PLEASE add more soon!! I'm LOVING it!
~Anna

Fang is a meanie-but-face. Gr. There are some bad guys that just get on my nerves, and he's one of them. Ugh. I think Faye should have thrown up on him, he did deserve it. Make Thorn or someone beat him up, okay? The only thing I didn't like (besides Mr. Meaniebutface Fang) was that Faye didn't try to lead Mr. Meaniebutface in the wrong direction. That way she could find a way to warn Thorn of Mr. Meaniebutface. Otherwise it was great! Go make the next chapter, and don't forget to kill off Mr. Meaniebutface (he would be lame as the main bad guy).

Wow...this was AWESOME! But you certainly left off at a cliff-hanger. What suspense! What adventure!

What a cliffhanger! You better update this sooner than last time! I liked the way you made Faye urgent to see Thorn again. Good, good. Update soon!

this is get'n good :) Please hurry and upload the rest!

This, again, was fabulous. I am so glad you finally updated! Please write more!

Nice job! I love this chapter. PLEASE write more!! I have GOT to know what happens! Keep up the AWESOME work!
~Anna

Really good story! I really like your writing style, you have a great way with words!
I'm curious, is there any particular reason why Thorn resembles Rurouni Kenshin?

Wow, this was very professional! You certianly have a talent for moving a story along, but still adding important details. I especially liked the use of "wares", it shows you have a well rounded vocabulary.

I can't wait for what'll happen next!

Yeah!! You did a good job! (As always!)

Wow! This story was really good. I wish I could write like that.
Keep writing--I want to know more!