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| silentscreamer07 2007-01-15 ch 1,  | abuseI absolutely loved this poem. It was simple, yet it had a meaning behind it, that was very..well..meaningful. Nothing is perfect. And that is very true. Even when there are moments that it feels like it is..or you see something that makes you think its perfect, sooner or later there is some flaw that comes around, to just show you once again, that its not perfect. lovely job! I liked this poem! And thanks too for the review! I appreciate it! :D Keep writing! ~Britney |
| Banshee Junior 2007-01-14 ch 1, | abuseI like the strong stand you take in this...not only are things imperfect, you let it show beautifully that you don't like it that way! With words like 'destroyed', 'made ugly', 'ruined' juxtaposed with your complimentary adjectives, you sound quite passionate. If there's one thing I would've liked, it would have been looking at how imperfection can be, in itself, beautiful at times. But that's more of personal opinion, and the ambiguity of your last line may actually show more than I think it does. |
| sicklysnowwhite 2007-01-13 ch 1, | abusethe second to last line makes the poem. it wouldnt be half as good without it, no matter the simplicity of the line. i feel like you shoud add people to the poem. like speack in a point of view. like, WE watch the beautiful sunset, made ugly... ect, ect. I view the masterful painting, ect, ect. do you know what i'm mean? |
| Da Vinci at Work 2006-12-13 ch 1, | abuseI like the last line. |
| capriciousguy 2006-12-08 ch 1, | abuseyou have very discriptive language. i love the 'one flaw, found anywhere, changes perfection into depression' very true, and the message is clear. the fact that there is a message is good too, you let it be clear that everything has a flaw even the most perfect of things. |
| ignominy 2006-11-30 ch 1, | abusei love this. my favorite line is The beautiful sunset, made ugly by some misplaced cloud. cause i get that all the time... awesome poem... there was one off line though... i didn't like the gorgeous face one. |