Hi... well i guess everyone gradually loses their "childish innocence" as they grow older... =/ anyway... good poem, you should write more ^^ (at least they only require one post... XD)

hey wow, that's a surprisingly good poem. it's beautifully written, and expresses exactly the thoughts many would feel about the ridiculous thing called life. just watch the paragraphing and format of the poem as it's a little confusing. keep up the good work and you'd make it far yet (:
ps i think i actually have met you before. perhaps in penang?

Hi. Well, overall I think the most outstanding point about this poem is that it contains vivd imagery and a sense of tragic innocence peppered with yearning.
Some of its parts aren't exactly original, but it's not all of them. Parts like driving around with a ice-cream truck emblazoned with the best friend's name are refreshing,though marriage with fifteen offsprings may not be.

I suppose I do like it. You have definitely raised your writing up a notch (or is that just your melancholic streak?),but nostalgia and sadness always makes a better writer (Lemony Snicket, anyone?).It is cliched in some places, and perhaps you should learn to apply some subtlety. Nevertheless, keep on going.

P.S: Well, you still have the right to tell me to piss off. Don't forget, you are the national #1!.

WeiYun, since when have you become so depressive? xD Anyway, it's a rather good poem. Exudes the sense of a want to be a child again. Keep it up (: