This is really good! I think it's really cool that you can write funny AND serious stuff, and do both really well.

I can't think of any criticisms besides you need to proofread it a bit, but i can't really suggest that because I don't exactly do that myself. And neither does Yalime, obviously.

Poor Mark. I've had days like that. Well, not EXACTLY like that.

If Earl is dead I shall be very angry. lol jk. *tear*

I can't wait to see what happens next, keep writing!

Although this is listed as a horror and suspense story, I love the little touches of humor you have in here! Situational irony always involves a bit of fun! And the humor isn't too much, or too little, either, but just enough to keep the story serious and moving along. And I could feel the suspense, too. I always wanted to know "What happened!" I loved the character's voices, too. You could really feel them, and relate to them as well in some aspects. You -care- about them. Yay!

I can't wait to see when the true horror comes in, though. Where's the next chapter, man?!