 Annie Jadin 2006-11-30 . chapter 1Excellent poem! Your words have a special lilting swing, just like the music you talk about. Just one suggestion...I would take off the period at the end of the second to last line, making it:
Play me the Blues
And Swing.
I like the flow better that way, as a reader. What do you think? Anyway, awesome poem, I love it! |