In the first to "paragraphs" you say "from time to time" twice. Think about changing that. Other than that great story!

"Travis squinted to make out the number on the cop's squad car. With Seth free, it wouldn't hurt to have a friend on the force for some legal assistance."

If there's anyone I feel sorry for, it's Quentin.

This can't end prettily.

Whoa, this is... Interesting, how the story shifts from one character to another. I like how you show that everyone has a dark side yet understandable motivation.

This looks promising, you use the kind of description I want to achieve. Maybe it could be more active, but it is just the first chapter, In any case, I like the story so far, keep it up.