omg, love this. it's so... i don't even know.

true maybe? it sounds like the truth.

Gorgeous imagery in stanza two, and a lovely concept for a poem. I like the way 'air' is left hanging in the air. Lovely stuff.

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I love it. it's like a painting. the last part stings. like your new pen name, by the way

Interesting poem. I really love the lines about the newspaper spread out on the table and gutted open. That is just the coolest description I've read in a long time. Fabulous verb usage there. The stanza about eating the peach is also fabulously done, and the way you rhymed skin and chin was subtle and nicely done. Great piece. Keep writing! :)

interesting...

your wording is very catchy and lyrical. I like this very much.