Very eloquently worded. I enjoyed this poem very much; the flow and rhythm fit so well with the words you chose. Great job. : )

Hmm…This is a very interesting style of writing. The poem seems to make no sense yet I understand it still…Oddly enough, I like it. I may attempt this style sometime, as I am a fan of experimenting with writing styles.

I like this--I'm on a poetry-reading kick at the moment. This created a really clear image in my head and I like your word use to fit with the setting of the poem (reside 'neath darker clay, for instance).

ugh...reluctant and disgusted admiration! lovely adjectives and verbs. you clearly are extraordinarily fluent in the English language. The ending gives it a depth, but it isn't unmistakable so there's no need to speculate on your "hidden message" (as poets are so apt to have). But the rhythm is uneven here and again and the eye rhymes vex me. I suppose what vexes me most of all is that I like it. Give me something I can mercilessly criticise dang it!

First off, most of your imagery was incredibly and the poem itself was extremely well-written.

However, this stanza seems a little awkward:

"Each cabin sleeps in shambles, their
Fine linens torn to shreds.
No pillows lie for pillaging.
The headboards lost their heads."

The ", there" just totally ruins the effect. As I read it, I was lost in the story until ", there". It pulled me outside of the castle and brought me back to the thought that I was reading a poem. In my opinion, if you removed that, it would be much more effective.

Also, phrases such as "whither in decay" and "drenched in blood" are very much overused in works, which deteriorated the originality of your poem. Try using more creative imagery. A couple of ones that were used that I particularly enjoyed were "veiled with ash" and "caked in mud" because you don't hear those very often.

Futhermore, compared to the rest of the poem, the ending was a little weak. The seventh stanza was awkwardly split (a simular problem to the one I mentioned in the last paragraph).

All in all, good. But not your best.

I loved it.

The imagery was magnificent, and I could definitely pick up the mood of your work. I loved how you described so many different objects... the throne room, the cabins, the victims, the castle's art, so on and so forth...
Definitely one of my favorites.

The imagery is stunning, even though I'm still not sure of what you're trying to say at the end. Still, this is one of the most affecting poems I've read. Haunting.

I do like your poetry. It's fun to read. It's strange though. I didn't see this decaying castle as being so sad and upsetting until the mention of victims. That caught me by surprise. I'm not sure if that's a good thing or a bad thing though. In any case, it was a fun read definitely. Keep up the poetry and thanks for the review.