this kind of reminds me of me...except I usually don't jump around on my bed or my brother would kill me, haha...I'm assuming the pill thing is sleeping pills?

good job!

How can you turn dancing on your bed into a bad thing? Haha, glow in the dark stars rock my socks, mainly cause they are so entertaining and glow in the dark-y. Well, at least you got to go to sleep, hey? Btw, what was the pill thing all about?

"Staring at the ceiling

Watching the cracks turn into

Glow-in-the-dark stars"

-I love these lines, they make the poem right from the begining...

Very well done, descriptive.

I like the images you use, as well as how the poem actually looks.

Good show.

(Hope you've gotten some sleep)

Eh...this was alright. The rhythm to it was unique, and the idea was new to me. As I read it, though, I kept wanting to read something that was more comical (I mean you did hit your head on the ceiling...and you're dancing on the bed!), but at points the descriptions seemed less interesting and more serious. Do I make sense? Probably not, but I hope you appreciate this review regardless. _ Have a nice Christmas...or w/e else you celebrate.

-Ry