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Isca 2008-05-23 ch 1,	abuseIt was very interesting. I liked it. "Like the floorboards that I hear."
GirlxAnachronism 2007-05-09 ch 1,	abuseI like this poem alot. I love the repetion of the description of the floorboards. And i love the way you describe the "monster" Very awsome
Lausell Morales 2007-03-14 ch 1,	abuseNot offended at all! This was a really unique poem with a lot of description. I felt a good flow thro this, also. Nice job!
S. Ben Beach 2007-01-20 ch 1,	abuseI'm not offended. That was brilliant!
greenGalilee 2007-01-06 ch 1,	abuseHuh. Pretty great poem. I read it and sat there thinking for a few minutes about what it said. I very much like the metaphors, and also the fact that they have subtly shown multiple layers that can be read in different ways. The overall tone is also very good, and it works well with the topic and the way you chose to write the poem. Good job.
Misery Is A Rockstar 2006-12-30 ch 1,	abuseThis poem is amazing. One of the best I've read. The description is flawless and the whole poem is very unique. Great job!
Holly Rose E 2006-12-27 ch 1,	abuseoh wow. i love the style you incorporated - such a nice story-telling ring to it, and for some reason i envisioned pilgrims and whatnot and it just made the imagery just that much more shattering. wonderful wonderful piece. going on my faves.
Awen1923 2006-12-17 ch 1,	abuseThis was very nicely written, and you did a good job with a potentially touchy topic - it feels like you are questioning and evaluating, not taking a stab at anything. You also have some very nice lines and wording. Keep up the excellent work and I am looking forward to reading more of your poetry.
Daughter3 of Fabian Cortez 2006-12-17 ch 1,	abuseGreat poem! I love the way it keeps you on edge and makes the reader gain more and more interest with each verse. This is a sort of poem people will continue to think about a long while after they have read it, Excellent work! Thanks for the review, Keep Writing! D3ofFC:)
Ryan Schiff 2006-12-08 ch 1,	abuseThere are things here I like and things here I don't. First of all, I like the narrative style, but there are things that break it. I hate when people parenthesize entire lines. It doesn't need to be done. Byron did it so he could include notes or witty remarks in his poems.
Jama 2006-12-05 ch 1, anon.	abuseThis is really amazing. I see what you're saying and I'm not offended. Please continue your work. You have a gift.
no.peace.los.angeles 2006-12-05 ch 1,	abuseWow, amazing piece. There's a lot to this, and you use metaphor so well in this. I have a hard time believing you're 15, because your writing defies your age. It's very mature, like you've lived through a lot and have so much to write about. But what do I know about you? Maybe you have been through a lot. Anyway, back to the piece. Your use of verbs in this pretty much rocks my world. They're strong and powerful and well-placed. Bravo. And have I ever thanked you for your reviews of my poetry? I do know you've reviewed a few things of mine. That means a lot to me. I'm sure I've said it in review replies, but to hear from someone such as yourself means quite a bit. Thank you. And beautiful work. Keep writing! :)
Cesalie Chase 2006-12-04 ch 1,	abuseI have to admit that, upon reading the summary of this poem, I wondered what sort of direction it would take. But having read it, now, I can honestly say that I'm really impressed - not only by your writing, but by the profound thought behind it. Your imagery is beautifully haunting (and, at the same time, hauntingly beautiful); I especially loved the idea of God creeping around the stairs of the house - the stairs leading up to the innermost dwelling place, the figurative heart. The image of setting traps and waiting with the rifle - "though don't shoot 'til you know it means no harm" - is particularly artistic. It seems like they, though extremely cautious, are giving God a chance (which is certainly not unreasonable - faith is a scary thing because it deals with the unseen and unsearchable). This was a wonderful poem. I love your freeverse style, and I also appreciate your proper use of punctuation in each line. (Poetry is text, too!) You've also a unique and clever way with words - a way that captures the real anxiety of a situation. I'll stop there. The poem is awesome. Keep that pen moving! Blessings! ~Jen
Kaosz 2006-12-04 ch 1,	abuseI love this poem, for me, it echos the feelings that religion attempts to impose. "God will know, and will be there always". For me religion has always had an ominous presence in the lives of the people the follow it. But that's my take on it. Great poem, keep writing, I can tell you've got a natural talent for it!
Karine Dragon'sheart 2006-12-04 ch 1,	abuseO_o...Honestly, I see it as though a minor god or godling was creeping about...beautiful repetition! I admire those people who can do such a thing...and make it come out right. My own writing style lies heavily on rhyme and roundabout ideas...but I love reading work I can't do. ^_^ Thanks for the review, too! Laters, KD

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