Beautiful rhyming, i really liked the 1st, 2nd, 4th, and 5th stanzas. :)

This is great! The lack of punctuation, the repetition, the pretty flowing words-- all of them make this poem seem like a dance put into words! I love how you did that-- it's so original and wonderful!
I had some trouble coming up with a criticism, but I guess it would be the that lines "Fae night/ faery night/ fae night", though as pretty as the rest of the poem, don't really make much sense. It can't be a night for faeries at the same time as a night for only one faerie, can it? I see why you did it, and it definitely has the right tone and all, but it's so confusing that I almost wish you hadn't. Or, perhaps, that I could stop thinking about it and just enjoy the poem instead of my self-made brain teaser! :)
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The imagery is very strong in this poem, but I think on the whole it is weakened by lack of punctuation and capitalization. As you told me, I'd consider which words are the most important and capitalize them for emphasis (unless you intend to create a song without it). Also, I understand you're working under the constraints of a metre, but consider your line breaks and also use them for emphasis (I'm thinking in particular of the last two lines in the fourth stanza). This is all technical, though, so if you do want the even, informal tone, I think it's excellent, save for maybe you break the metre in the fifth stanza, which I would suggest doing more frequently for informality.

Great poem. It flowed well and had wonderful imagery. I also liked your use of rhyme. Nicely done.