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Reviews For: The Nothing

Ronnie
2007-01-22
ch 1, anon.
abuseWhen you described him, you said so many things about his being nothing, it almost made it seem like he was so many things. And then it is counter balanced when you say that he is filled with more passion and emotion than he had ever known (which would more than likely be hardly any). I like that, and you said nothing 26 times in this story, so by the end, nothing starts to seem like something. As if there is more to it than we know. I like this one alot.
Brown
2007-01-19
ch 1, anon.
abuseSo Joseph, while those trapped in nothing must change, does nothing ever change? "Everything" must constantly change, but nothing seems like it's constant.

Great tale. You're quite a writer, although this seems to be more of a prose poem than a story. Excellent use of metaphor.
Melissa
2006-12-14
ch 1, anon.
abuseI had to re-read it to fully enjoy the mastery of the extended metaphor. My only criticism is the repetition of the word "nothing" in the fifth pragraph. I fully understand the meaning of it, and the need, as it is the title; I just find myself tripping on it by the end. The language is dripping with sensory imagery. The archetypal journey towards the light takes a new twist in this piece.
Exiled-Knight
2006-12-03
ch 1,
abuseThat was really beautiful. I haven't reviewed in forever, so pardon how lame they will be. I loved the descriptions as always, the story was simple yet complex, and the final image was so beautiful. Great job, you are back and better then ever :D
Darklight Shadow
2006-12-02
ch 1,
abuseOkay.. I don't really know how to describe your story. It seemed to be a little dark and I would like to know more about this 'wraithy vampire thing'. I hope you are going to continue this story if that's possibe. Anyway, this is a great story, albeit a little short but that's okay because you are a good writer. Well done!
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