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| mysunwolf 2006-12-27 ch 1,  | abuseYeah, this hit me hard, reminded me of times past. Brilliant little piece, though the dialogue is a little too perfect, I wish people really did speak so nicely. Guess it adds almost a poetic quality. Very good :) |
| MarshaRMalcolm 2006-12-01 ch 1, | abuseIt's simple yet affective. I would have liked a little more description in it, to give it a little more sustenence, but like I said; affective. It reminds me of Pink Floyd's rock opera "The Wall", about how the main character takes all his experiences in his life, mostly bad or deprived memories, and turns them into 'bricks' in which he builds a wall between himself and reality, then quietly goes insane. Good topic. Short and Sweet. I like it. Would you mind taking a look at the trial chapter I have for my story? |