This is a nice change from the typical romance story. It doesn't follow the stupid formula of girl chases after boy, love rivals, triangles, and the fake OMGZ drama. It's too bad that it's being over looked. The flow in this story is really good almost like poetry and your characters actual seem like they have some backbone and depth in them. The change of 1st character pov between Moira and Kaden is a really good idea as oppossed to switching of 3rd person limited between them cuz it gets readers to get closer to the characters better. Sadly it took me a while to notice there was a pov change because I'm just slow like that. I was so confused when I saw "I'm Kaden" and was going like 'Hey I thought the main character was Moira.' Ha ha Moira kind of sounds like the spanish word of to die 'morir'. Ha ha spanish so glad I'm not taking it anymore. I found it a lil weird that Kaden didn't like Tris cuz October said something about them being friends. I guess he doesn't like Tris cuz he's friends with October now. Or maybe he has never liked him and just put up with him who knows. Well, you do and I should stop going on and on and wasting review space. Still I like October she seems interesting and oh course she's named after the month I was born under. Month names are awesome. So yea that's all I got for commentary. ~Toodles