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| monster dia 2008-07-02 ch 1,  | abusethis stream of consciousness has my heart thumping like an off-beat drumline. |
| Chocolate Herrings 2008-06-02 ch 1, | abuseYou have perfectly described the imperfect. I can't number the amount of poetry mouthed girls that I know who fit into every detail of this poem. |
| generically beautiful 2007-09-07 ch 1, | abuseand oh! how many “poetgirls” can relate. i love how the lines all run together chaotically in a way that echoes the speaker's lifestyle. beautifully written. |
| palahniukid 2007-07-04 ch 1, | abuseI read this all without realizing I was holding my breath and only exhaled once I reached the end. The way the lines run together like a single thought creates this enormously paranoid kind of suspense. Really, there's so much beauty in this, and so much idealism too, but without the cliche. I feel slightly sick and dizzy now... |
| don't give me no sass quach 2007-06-12 ch 1, | abusei love this. marry me, please? |
| poisonous 2007-04-24 ch 1, | abusedamn, you ** had me. i was that chick and that poem telling the world where to go. this poem is a revolution. get that ** and keep it. you are amazing. that description was marvelous almost seems like those words were spoken not written. this poem feels lived. and i love it. |
| Her Wishing Well 2007-02-27 ch 1, | abuseAmazing detail and amazing imagery, purely amazing |
| ShadesofBlue69 2006-12-23 ch 1, | abusehey! I like this, it has great imagery! um yah nothing much else to say but, good job! *favorites* |
| Delirium Batharie 2006-12-17 ch 1, | abuseAh, yes...join the revolution. |
| Elenive 2006-12-17 ch 1, | abuseHarsh and mesmorizing. Reminds me of a short film, I don't know why. I find some irony in this piece, but it's muted. The messy structure coincides with the messy images. It's disheveld, but all the loose ends tie back in again. Love it. |
| thisisridiculous 2006-12-11 ch 1, | abusesomehow, when i read this, i'm there. well done. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-12-07 ch 1, | abuseOMG, this is going on my favorites. I love all these details and how this is so stream-of-consciousness, and I want to be this girl. The part that got me? "my lips are cherry flavored on his dick." OMG. I read that and was like, favorites. Right now. ** yes, the poetgirls are striking back. Love this. I want to be this. Gorgeous. Keep writing! :) |
| lackluster 2006-12-06 ch 1, | abusei read this a while ago (sorry for the long time) and it blew me away the first time. now, it's more of a numb ache at the end. still amazing. |
| none of burt's beeswax 2006-12-05 ch 1, | abusei know all about staining pillowcases with eyeliner. i lovelovelove sharpies on sneakers, and the imagery in this, which is simply fantastic. it reminds me of that scene in "thirteen" when evan rachel wood is spinning around on that playground kid's toy, and she's screaming at the top of her lungs. gorgeous. |
| dress her up in fairytales 2006-12-04 ch 1, | abuseomg, i love plath. i loved her the instant i read about her for an english project without reading any of her pieces. but now, i'm utterly addicted to her. "my smile is/sarcasm dripping." that's amazing & that's often how i feel. i also like how this is sort of an explination of your pen name. i could never do that. |